Let me lie awhile with you

Before the sky decides to kiss you,

Falling to the ground,

Breaking into infinite

Infinitesimal pieces of calming blue,

Splashing upon us the cerulean waters of life,

Let me lie awhile with you,

Gazing into your blue iris that reflects

The sheet of azure winking at you,

And talking of how the sky feels dull without you.

 

My heart, be still; your lonely will

Is perched upon my skin.

A thousand dreams, delectable

Are what I find within.

 

Before this army of red-drenched roses

Sheds its thorns and bathes you

With the crimson velvet petals

Of a thousand young blossoms

Dissolving on your cherry-red lips,

Let me lie awhile with you,

My fingers tracing the yet-to-dissolve roses

On the contour of your lips,

Inhaling the fragrance of your thoughts.

 

My heart, awake! And seize the day

For here she lies with you.

A thousand dreams can wait today;

For here she lies, for true.

 

Before the gardens of tomorrow

Come running with their clothes of green,

To save your innocence

And cling to envious faces, jealous of your auburn hair,

Let me lie awhile with you

And talk about the malachite

Hues of nature,

And talk about you,

And things that make no sense.

 

My heart, the special hour is now,

And time has crawled, to cease.

She waits for you to speak today;

Now find your true release.

Reviews

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

This is beautiful..and also peaceful...it lingers on like an endless love note and as it ends your readers still don't want you to end it..it is that beautiful..:)
I like how you start the best..Falling to the ground,

Breaking into infinite

Infinitesimal pieces of calming blue,

Splashing upon us the cerulean waters of life,
Very eloquent imagery..as i try and imagine the sky falling into infinitesimal pieces of calming blue,it immediately brings upon me a sense of tranquil :)..
This seems like one of the moments when we simply want to let go of mundane around us and give in ourselves to the nature throbbing around us and our loved ones...

[mystique]

ITS ONE OF THE BEST POEM I HAVE EVER READ . IT SERIOUSLY IS as soon as i read it all i could do is blink nand think that youve actually experienced this or not
cuz this is great the italics give a splendous touch to the effectious writting

[Shalini Dinesh]

Love poem expressed in loveliest form, the style of write, the words chosen and the feel behind it, all blends so well...

[FlawedByDesign]

I hope that you had enough paint to illustrate this beauty on the canvas, because you have truly exhausted the colours red, blue and green.

I love the following reference,
"Let me lie awhile with you
And talk about the malachite
Hues of nature," - not only does malachite imply green, but a gem like quality; nicely done.

*The only thing I can bring up is the following,
"A thousand dreams, delectable
Are what I find within." - I know that it is "a thousand dreams" hence many, but "a thousand" is one, so I think it should say "Is what I find within"

Nicely done.

[Ruth]

ABSOLUTELY BEAUTIFUL!
I am so enthralled by this love! What an absolute pleasure to read and a dance with both shades of blue and red! lol Passion and desire, wow!
LOVE it:)
I love your style love!
xx

[Fran Marie]

My heart, be still; your lonely will
Is perched upon my skin.
A thousand dreams, delectable
Are what I find within.

A lovely verse which glides across the page softly as a murmuring breeze

whispering love notes from the heart~a beautiful poetic piece to be sure

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

Your homage to love and the one you love is breathtakingly beautiful. The imagery is vivid, a canvas for the mind.

Linda Marie

[Adelia Alighieri]

You used so many precise colors and textures to create the most perfect image for the reader. I enjoyed reading it, just like I always do. :)

[Miss Coral]

Absolutely beautiful piece. The imagery was wonderfully painted. Excellent job.

[nono]

Very nice....love the tittle...and the over all poem