If I'm not mistaking, you told me once that you do not like love poems or writing about romance. I think you were just pulling my leg - hehe
You express your sentiments nicely; you are a prisoner of her rapture and it shows.
I do like "Incise me with your lips"a lot, as it shows the power of her love to cut you and imbue love passion into your body.
I enjoyed the uniform rhyme with the "you", but then you just had to break the pattern in the last stanza, didnt you - lol
A very smart and intelligent exploitation of poetic skill and technique. Each line compliments and confirms the existence of the last, engaging the mind of the reader, so that the lyrical pleasure and imagery of the words is enhanced. As a poem of love or adoration or obsession, call it what you will, it is a very fine example. It flows off the tongue beautifully and displays all the trademarks of a craftsman indulging himself, but with the result still reflective of his accomplishments as an artist.
aww... sweet and genuine and romantic.
You've captured some fantastic imagery here -
Impale me with your eyes
And I'll bleed my love for you.
Hang me from your eyelash;
Let me waltz the night with you.
The poem is filled with gentle passion a lot of love. I like the gentle and slow pace of the poem. Emotion and the gift of passion need a lot of time and patience. A outstanding poem.
Coyote
This is a lovely poem. It's intricately woven with sharp words -impale, bleed, incise, sedate, drown- that accentuate the intensity of passion. A problem with love poems tends to be an almost obsessive, one-sided preoccupation with the lover, but I find the relationship in this to be wonderfully expressed as equally balanced…such as 'Kiss my pain away and/Let me heal your scars for you'. It’s a harmonious read; every word is tucked in so pleasantly. Truly superb!
If I'm not mistaking, you told me once that you do not like love poems or writing about romance. I think you were just pulling my leg - hehe
You express your sentiments nicely; you are a prisoner of her rapture and it shows.
I do like "Incise me with your lips"a lot, as it shows the power of her love to cut you and imbue love passion into your body.
I enjoyed the uniform rhyme with the "you", but then you just had to break the pattern in the last stanza, didnt you - lol
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