Prolapse

Sudden valve prolapse -
You burst through my ventricle
Resuscitate me.

Reviews

[Cassiopia Summers]

I agree with Faryn. (: Different but lovely.

[faryn wolff]

I love this. Interesting how the use of technical medical words inspires a loving message. Very creative, wonderful write!

[FlawedByDesign]

I believe you mentioned in the review of my haiku how you can were not a big fan - haha - what gives...

Nicely done :)

[Awdures]

Articulate senryu here, your use of powerful words in so few lines does you much credit. Very enjoyable ditty :)

[Fran Marie]

A creative Senryu~love the content used here;

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

You have a tendency to use medical terms ;) can't blame ya :p jokes apart..prolapse and resuscitate are very strong terms,well used.

[Dinesh Sairam]

See? Even if you don't like haikus, they love you a lot :P Very well written indeed :) Why have you disabled rating? :P

[Jasmine]

short, sweet and to the point. a brilliant haiku.

[Poeticpiers]

original senryu Excellent

[Bittersweet]

A perfect example of Love from a doctor's eye!
n a perfect haiku i guess

:)