A Long Night

The night is bleak and bleaker still,
And heavy hangs the brooding air.
The moon is lost, as are the stars
As is their lustre from afar,
All drowned in darkness and despair.

The night is cold and colder still.
The guests have left; did they arrive?
Alone you watch the gloomy waltz
Of misty frost as dread befalls
And dances into night's archives.

The night is lonely; lonely still;
And from your heart's forbidden rails
You strive to steal a fulsome sight
Of knowing faces and delight
Till all you get are cold entrails.

The night is long, and longer still,
While counting seconds with your heart.
You wait for dawn, that never breaks
And rue your never dead mistakes
And try to stand up and depart.

A long night - epilogue

The night is gone, you're breathing - still.
It tried its best to push downhill
Your fragile thoughts till when until
It knew that it could never kill
Your patient heart and silent will.

Reviews

[KatiePie]

That was.. just flat down, no questions asked, gorgeous.
The flow is beautiful and there were no flaws in it.
Again, with your super skill of making me actually like poems with repetition in them.
Amazing job :)
-Cathrine

[Sweet_pale_cacophony]

Ah!you know..i liked this write a lot.It shows your skill with words so very nicely.You have a steady grip over words and your emotions which when you blend it with sheer wit it makes for a lovely read.It is wonderful how you have used the repeated one line here,it actually adds to the effect of it all and you have used that phrase quite nicely ...using it where and when you should without growing redundant...
t knew that it could never kill
Your patient heart and silent will.
i read that line many times,usually i read write ups very fast but there was something so unpredictable about that last stanza that it caught me and i read them again and again,in some ways it reminded me of my heart.