Dancing with her

She's bathed by nectar from a bleeding rose,

She's draped by sunshine and morning yellow.

She tastes of honey and smells of musk,

And sounds like violin kissed by cello.

 

She looks like a million dreams of yore;

She walks like a song, pure and free.

Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;

And every word she speaks is poetry.

 

She smiles like the sky in its bluest hour,

Her face is chiseled by God's own hands.  

Her eyes radiate like the sleepy moon;

My heartbeat is in their command.

 

She wears my dreams effortlessly;

She slips into them every night,

To dance her way into my heart,

With uncut love and soothing delight.

 

I do not want to live forever

When I can sway here in her breeze;

And see her slip into my dreams;

And dance to love's serene decrees.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. this is a fiercely passionate piece that is mesmorizing and lyrical to the max! Loved the rhythm, rhyme and beat.. can well see this played in song! Also a very high tribute to someone of very high praise in your heart! Loved the entire piece the stanza:

She looks like a million dreams of yore;
She walks like a song, pure and free.
Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;
And every word she speaks is poetry.

this is a poem in itself.. lucky woman to have such admiration on so many levels! Beautiful and intoxicating.. fantastic work that goes to my favs!

[Awdures]

What beauty you portray here and such warmth and skill in the rhyme. You know I adore rhyme! This flows effortlessly just like a pair of lovers dancing into the night. A young man's adoration of a beautiful woman *sigh* makes me feel 18 again!

Excellent write once again.

[R E Tree]

This describes Miss Incredible who could do everything even the impossible. Everything about her is so damn perfect. I love the forth stanza, we all dream of fantasys but this stanza describes a dream that can never be forgotten. If this woman was real I bet she would love every line to this poem

[Ashley.M.E]

I just have to say well done, I love this poem.

[Augustus]

An immensely beautiful write once again, Abdul! As I have said before, your poem flows exceedingly well in spite of metrical imperfections. I do however agree with Sagar in that fine tuning the meter might enhance the overall effect of the poem.
There is considerable aesthetic value in this poem and many lines are outstanding...the imagery is lovely as usual... Since everybody down below seem to have picked their favourite stanza, let me do the same...

She wears my dreams effortlessly;
She slips into them every night.
She dances her way into my heart,
With uncut love and soothing delight.

the phrase "wear my dreams" is unique in its elegance....
Overall, I would say this is vintage Abdul Aziz... :)
at least, based on what I have read from you so far...
A job well done, yet again!

[deeps]

She wears my dreams effortlessly;
She slips into them every night.
She dances her way into my heart,
With uncut love and soothing delight.

I love these lines here, this is one amazing write.
Very sweet and lovely. I like this alot.

[Adarsh]

Vivid with imagery this poem bears the testimony to the fact that words can paint a picture in one's mind. You don't need to see something to visualize it. You just drop by the cafe and find and read a poem from the likes of RhymingReactivated.

The dream girl is so beautifully expressed in this poem that I don't need to meet her to know her. I see and understand her from your eyes (or words). :-)

These were the best of all -

"She looks like a million dreams of yore;
She walks like a song, pure and free.
Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;
And every word she speaks is poetry."

Of course. Don't we all get enchanted by that special someone? "Million dreams of yore" was an apt expression. And yes that line about laughter, it was exactly what one feels.

And

"I do not want to live forever
When I can sway for an hour in her breeze;
When I can see her slip into my dreams;
Dance with her to love's idyllic decrees."

Accolades! These were very beautiful!! The ending was really good. Keep rhyming. :-)

[Sagar Patil]

Very romantic. As romantic as it gets. I quite disagree with Dinu(pardon me Dinesh :) ) down below, and believe this to be one of your best poems Abdul. I think this can be made (more) metrical with little effort.

The imageries are vivid, subtle and peaceful. Exactly what GB calls "A Poem that becomes close to the readers heart"

Well done.

PS : Don't look at my ratings for the most part or dwell upon them. I'm very harsh there. Even upon myself. And the scales I use are different for different poets.

[Fran Marie]

She smiles like the sky in its bluest hour,
Her face is chiseled by God's own hands.
Her eyes radiate like the sleepy moon;
My heartbeat is in their command.

The above my favorite part; the entire piece is penned in sheer beauty~

so eloquent in its poetic expression, Indeed, Quite Lovely!

[Dinesh Sairam]

Nice poem mate :) But the first thought that hit me was 'Abdul has done better poems'.. :) When compared to 'She's my dreams' and 'My blue eyed morning' and 'You bridge the gap', this seems to disappear. But, wholly, it's a neat write, well put and nicely rhymed. Kudos. Keep writing.