Dancing with her

She's bathed by nectar from a bleeding rose,

She's draped by sunshine and morning yellow.

She tastes of honey and smells of musk,

And sounds like violin kissed by cello.

 

She looks like a million dreams of yore;

She walks like a song, pure and free.

Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;

And every word she speaks is poetry.

 

She smiles like the sky in its bluest hour,

Her face is chiseled by God's own hands.  

Her eyes radiate like the sleepy moon;

My heartbeat is in their command.

 

She wears my dreams effortlessly;

She slips into them every night,

To dance her way into my heart,

With uncut love and soothing delight.

 

I do not want to live forever

When I can sway here in her breeze;

And see her slip into my dreams;

And dance to love's serene decrees.

Reviews

[LisetteCanWrite!]

Wow.. this is a fiercely passionate piece that is mesmorizing and lyrical to the max! Loved the rhythm, rhyme and beat.. can well see this played in song! Also a very high tribute to someone of very high praise in your heart! Loved the entire piece the stanza:

She looks like a million dreams of yore;
She walks like a song, pure and free.
Her laughter rings like a songbird's note;
And every word she speaks is poetry.

this is a poem in itself.. lucky woman to have such admiration on so many levels! Beautiful and intoxicating.. fantastic work that goes to my favs!

[Cristal Bridges]

This is absolutely exquisite! It is so full and lush, filled with delightful description. I love the line; "And sounds like violin kissed by cello." That's a great personification! This is one of my favorite poems! :) Great job!

[The Water Queen]

This very powerful and passionate with its words. Great poem

[Rose Tyler]

Beautiful. Excellent. Passionate.
Thank you for requesting me read this one; I love it!

[Brit Riot]

This poem made me smile throughout.
You capture passion so perfectly, this is a BRILLIANT piece.
It flows so beautifully, as beautiful as the woman you are describing, and it makes me feel so happy to read it. It is powerful, and enchanting. I literally can feel your emotions and I read them.
and perfect, and beautiful piece of work.
I can't wait to read more from you. This is stunning.

[LittleMadGirl]

impressive
Every word you wrote was poetry
I like how you make the classic way of writing (with rhymes and rhythm) come to live again
Especially the first stanza is filled with beauty, you have a talent for finding fitting phrases

[KatiePie]

I ate a couple of cookies earlier today, chocolate chip, the kind that melt in your mouth and make you believe there is nothing that could possibly compare to the taste of it.
But this.. was, let's just say better than the cookies :)
The way it flows it's like a song playing in my heart now, and I can't even begin to describe how those words tasted.
Saying them aloud was like seeing color for the first time, or breathing in the sweetest air.
This makes love stories that people have cried at.. for hours upon hours seem black and white (though some of them are).
I can't say that it's corny, though the concept of it is, the way you expressed it is so not, it's unique and bold and powerful yet gentle, and sweet as honey but scorching because I don't have a love like this anymore.
I could probably go on about this forever... but I don't want to bore you with my words, so I think I'll just read it to myself a few more times.
Hehe ^-^
-Cathrine

[Zeinab]

Wow, this is beautifully written. Thank you for sharing.

[vb11]

I love the rhyme scheme in this poem, it flows without being sing-songy or sounding childish. The description used was very beautiful as well, describing someone beautiful without sounding cheesy or shallow. I also really liked how you described her in the first four stanzas in mostly third person, then switch to first person on the fifth stanza. Keep up the good work

[Bridget Mcmaken]

wow love the poem! This is just great work.

[Alicante lullaby]

this guy loves her terribly...beautiful...love filled and succinct...Romantic...rhyming is nothing i can dare advise rhymingreactivated about so perfect.