Everyday is beautiful - A nursery rhyme

The sun plays hide and seek,
Each day of every week
Behind clouds, to disappear
Like a golden chandelier.

It sometimes hides itself completely;
Sometimes shows up quite discreetly;
But every cloud that does its hiding
Fails to hide its silver lining
To those who dare to look
And search in every nook
For every ray and thread of hope
To make their helping rope
To climb imposing days
And let their sorrows fade away.

For then, the sun shines bright
And the only clouds in sight
Seem like wispy cotton threads
On a blue and lovely bed.

Dare to search for hope and find -
You'll leave your sorrows far behind.
And if in your search you're dutiful,
Watch your day turn beautiful.

Author's Note

I've deliberately tried to write a nursery rhyme-ish kinda poem here. I don't know if it works. Please let me know!

Reviews

[FlawedByDesign]

I'll agree with Linda in that the vocabulary in your "nursery rhyme" is a bit advanced at times and may fly over the kids' heads, but then again they are more interested in the flow of the nursery rhyme, because that is what makes them remember. It's got to have staying power, so to speak, and I think this poem of your does.

Nicely done.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. You are right. We look for sadness and pain. We will find it. I like the last set of lines. We need to look for the good in a life. A outstanding poem as always my Poet Friend.
Coyote

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

I like the message:

Whatever you are looking for, you'll find.

If you have the notion to have a beautiful day, you will. If not, you won't.

I love the notion of the poem and the idea behind it, but I wouldn't say that it's a nursery rhyme in any way. Your poem is more spirituous and uplifting.

Typically, nursery rhymes are simple in their vocabulary and have a repetitious, catchy rhyme, which children can pick up and repeat quickly. Your poem doesn’t strike me that way at all.

It’s not a slight to your poem, as it’s wonderful; but I think its maturity level surpasses that of the nursery.


Linda Marie

[Adelia Alighieri]

It does have an impeccable nursery rhyme taste yes; however I think the word 'discreetly' doesn't fit in the rhythm quite well.
I really liked the sweetness and hope it holds throughout the entire piece, though! A major ingredient for your theme. :) Great job anyway, I liked reading it.

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

Its an awesome piece but i don't know about the nursery rhyme thing.