A rumour's steeple

A word here,
A word there,
And here's a
Word replaced.
A twist of the tongue,
A slip from a rung,
Hence is a
Heart displaced.

Watering words,
Wandering herds,
Thus is truth
Led astray.
Trust was a word,
But now has it heard,
That it can
Be betrayed.

A heart hears
Its hurt tears,
As drenched
It is with pain.
All for but
A sinning word.
But the world has
Got it sained.

A lie uttered,
No gain earned;
Trust broken
On the way.
Hear, people,
A rumour's steeple
Pierces all,
With none to pay.

Reviews

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

The first stanza serves as a nice introduction and reverberates nicely with the title of the poem. A rumor gets started so innocuously. It starts with one person who tells another who tells another who tells another; and before you know it, what comes out in the end wasn’t what was stated at all. I like the novel idea of a rumor rising like a steeple. It really can become that grand!

An old Chinese Proverb:

I hear and I forget.
I see and I remember.
I do and I understand.

When it comes to rumors, however, it seems like people are quick to believe and slow to forget.

[Coyote Poetry]

A interesting thing is a rumor steeple. I wonder does it have any effect? A very strong poem. I like the desire goal of the poem. A excellent poem.
Coyote

[Dinesh Sairam]

The title was good. I loved the pattern, that's something new for me. And the ol' 'Dancing words' of yours I see again. I have not much words to say - But this definitely could be bettered. Think of editing it. Keep writing,

[jenniewren (J.W. Bouwma..]

LOVE the structure used in this.. *ponders* i think my favourite lines are the last four. they hold an intriguing profoundity...

[FlawedByDesign]

I love the short lines. They are hard hitting and beg to be read without pause to keep with the flow. You've enhanced the flow further with some nice rhymes.

My favourite line have to be,
"All for but
A sinning word,
The world has
Got it sained." - words can be pretty sinful and I love the idea of making a cross to protect oneself against those evil words - hehe.

Well done!

btw..."sained" is used as an adjective here correct?

[Alicante lullaby]

flowy,flawless...you seem to be ancient.ha

[Jasmine]

great structure, imagery, vocabulary...glad I stumbled upon your poem today.

[An owl on the moon]

Your lines give a powerful glimmer into the heart and soul. Each line is like a stroke from a paintbrush, flooding the canvass with vibrant color.

[Awdures]

Someone told me once don't use rhyme to convey a serious message and I asked them why not? This is just yet another example of how perfect rythm and rhyme are to set tempo and feel for mood in a poem. I loved the succinct feel to the lines. Made sense with the dark message conveyed.

Excellent work loveley keep at it :)

[ScarlettTheDreamer]

A great poem. I liked it.