Thoughts of you

Thoughts of you

A Poem by Abdul Aziz

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

© 2010 Abdul Aziz


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I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.




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I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

Posted 14 Years Ago


8 of 8 people found this review constructive.

This is simply amazing, I like this alot.
Excellent flow and rhyme scheme.

Posted 14 Years Ago


great use of rhyme, i wonder if you have considered studying emily dickensons use of slant rhyme as well as the diction and iambic techniques of frost. If you want to write rhymed/metric poetry in the 21c. those are the poets i would study and know intimately.

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This was simply amazing! I could truly see this worked into a song.. it rhymes so intensely and with so much catchiness! Uplifting would be an understatement.. this writing made my night! Loved it .. truly! I'm definitely going to have to check out some more of your work.. this was full of passion, desire and fun!

Posted 14 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Abdul Aziz
Abdul Aziz

Chennai, Tamil Nadu, India



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