Thoughts of you

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

Reviews

[Devons]

I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

[Ruth]

This is a unique slant of a love poem:)
A piece that envelops a lot of external influence within it too and also, gets the reader thinking of the elements within nature!
xx

[Elaine]

I love this sooo much. First of all turquoise is my favorite color in the entire world...not only that but you describe what impression every girl wants to leave in a guys heart. i truely love it. amazing job.

[the_stoic]

" The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you. "

from an engineering student to a medical student - dude your words are mesmerizing ! having written love poems myself i know that these imageries are something that only true love can conjure ... enjoyed this write

[KatiePie]

This is.. My God I can't even think of the right word, or words for this. It was beautiful, and gorgeous. It took my breath away, I can't even begin to express the amount of emotions that this is stirring inside of me right now. It's got this sort of edge to it. Amazing write :) I loved it :)
-Cathrine

[Griffin Hill]

Very nice meter and rhyme. Well done.

[R E Tree]

Powerful and thoughtful. Great write and my favourite rhyme is fly and why they perfectly go together. I sense some enlightment from this poem its not too dark and full of misery its more cheerful.

[Kanattas Atir Enomo]

wow this poem is absolutely beautiful. i dont think i can say much that devons hasn't already. i love the rhyme scheme. you managed to make it flow together flawlessly. truly a really amazing piece. and that really all i can say without repeating what devons already said. great job

[Elizabeth]

I love the sentiment and imagery. I was hooked from the first stanza.

[sayandeep kundu]

splendid.. keep writing such stuff.:)

[Ashley.M.E]

This is a really good poem, it goes togeither so well. Well done.