Thoughts of you

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

Reviews

[Devons]

I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

[Augustus]

I have reviewed this before I think, on orkut. And I was blown away by it completely at that time. And frankly, nothing has changed since then.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise. "
I have said this there and I will say it here...Nobody, not even Wordsworth ever thought of calling the sky "turquoise dreams"
And yet again, I'll repeat my words...If the sky runs out of praise, I have something in common with the sky.
This is without a shadow of a doubt, my personal favourite from your treasure of exceptional verse....

[zombiikillah666]

flows well.
i really liked this.
emotional and
has alot of meaning.
awesome poem (:

[Truly Ross-Wisehart]

Absolutely wonderful. Certainly you have raised the bar for how a love poem ought to be written and I hope that many we take a look, if not rise to the challenge. Excellent imagery, especially in this stanza:

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The sky is infinite, yet she has managed to fill it and set it on fire. Wonderful!

~True

[Elizabeth]

The verses are well crafted, as is the rhyme scheme. The images are lovely. I really loved this. I had to come back and add my other 2 cents. :)

[Dupree]

I may not be much of a critic, but I love this poem. It is a new take on an old type of poem. Very fresh, like a breath of fresh air.

[SamBug]

THis was very unique and I enjoyed reading it beginning from end. Great job!!!

[Broken.buddy]

I always look for messages and/or imagery in poetry.When it comes to a love poem, I look for both.This piece gave me something extra along with the mentioned both , Two minutes of sheer joy of getting a ride in nature and too many lines to read again and again.I should say I am very lucky that I started reading your poems starting with this one

[Prateeksha Khot]

Its being AGES since I have come across a good love poem and yours is absolutely top-notch ! Never going overboard with the display of emotions, I love the choice of words in the poem.

Keep writing!

[Ryan Falzon - Tymon]

The rhyming is very well done, and it captures a safe and warm feeling. Great write!

[R.S. Wilder]

First of all, from reading this poem you chose the PERFECT alias. I applaud your work, and I might have a little crush as well, because it's rare to find a guy who can string such eloquent words together to express the magic of the love that he feels.
And since we all know what a standing ovation implies, I won't spoil the moment with any more words.