Thoughts of you

An icy sight: it's scorching bright -
You set my heart on fire.
I feel alright, but shine alight
With the glimmer of desire.

The road glides on like an endless song-
Enchanting, is the view.
A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you.

Now runs the sun, he comes undone -
He's drenched, with dewy palms.
He stops the fun, the race is won -
You've imbued him with calm.

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

The clouds are shy: how low they fly -
They offer me a clue.
They try and try, I don't know why
To make me think of you.

I sit and think with misty blinks -
You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes.

Reviews

[Devons]

I have a very harsh and critical eye when it comes to poems of love... but this poem ranks as the best positive appraisal of that much-vaunted emotion that I have read in a while... probably ever here on this site. And it is a man, ironically, who manages to achieve that esoteric claim.
This is truly a very beautiful testament to the subject and is conceived with intelligence and a high skill for finding the right words and rhyme.
"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze. "
..This verse is outstanding poetry, the sort of standard that should be set in this kind of genre. I only wish I could advertise that fact more widely than I am able to. The message: THIS is how to write a love poem.

[Pash]

Loved every moment of it! Your word choices are sharp and purposeful . Elevated level of poetry. Beautifully written and well designed. I'm a fan.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you!

[Ayvid N]

I agree with Devon. You are the best contemporary English poet I have met on WC from our country. I try to look for flaws in grammar or structuring when I read poetry but these verses are perfect and the rhyming is great. All the feelings come across beautifully.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much for your kind words :) I must exhort you to read my friend, Dinesh Sairam's works. I'm sure you'll change your opinion about the best contemporary English poet on WC from India :)

[AK]

This poem is absolutely brilliant! The description and imagery are unimaginably good. The last stanza ended the poem really well. I loved it! Keep writing!

[Baz]

A wonderful demonstration of rhyme and meter. I know from experience that the rhyming style you have used here is very difficult to do, and you do it expertly here. Fantastic.

[~~~~~]

I thought this to be a clever, well executed composition....every other line set to internal rhyme as well as your ab,ab rhyming scheme. Your choice of verse seemed to exhibit a movement of fluidity with pleasant and aesthetic lyricism.

[Stammers]

Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze.

That's gorgeous, pieces of this are very comfortable and very beautiful, a modern, yet elegant love poem, with a hint of darker imagery. Great write

[Jasmine]

something about this dragged me in and forced me to read it. wonderful descriptions and imagery - "Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze."

fiery and emotive. wow...keep up the excellent work!

[Adelia Alighieri]

Gosh this poem kinda 'raises' my standards of liking romantic poetry. Again, I must appreciate your choice of words and your ability to transform your imagination into art. Superb.

[Linda Marie Van Tassell]

These lines are strikingly beautiful:

"A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you."

"Turquoise dreams, cerulean themes-
The sky runs out of praise.
It bursts at seams or so it seems -
You've set it all ablaze."

"My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes."

The last stanza is completely endearing!

Linda Marie Van Tassell

[Dinesh Sairam]

A very flattering and picturesque verse. Perfect in all aspects of Rhyme, meter and imagery (and Flattery :P). This is (another) one of your poems I wish was mine :( :P Though I suck at meters, lol. Many lines stood out,

"A halcyon eternal dawn
When kissed by thoughts of you."

"You've set it all ablaze."

"You cool my raging eyes.
My smiles - they cling to smiley winks
And your promising goodbyes. "

Very well done, machi.. :)