Together

 

Together

 

I swear I can breathe your scent

when I wake up alone

and grasp at the quaint nothingness;

These molecules of air dancing

since when you breathed here.

Your visions, they haunt me,

with trembling hips taunting

through your mascaraed eyes;

Memories of a time when

we found the answers to ourselves.

I hold you in my dreams,

pushing away the world

and I realise

we are together in our loneliness,

when we really should be

alone together.

 

Reviews

[The dark story]

Ravishing!! It is captivating with its very sublime diction which are strong enough to express the pure sentiments. Nice write. Thanks for sharing!!

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much. I'm glad you found it nice :)

[Lilly]

Simply beautiful!
So well expressing, beautiful emotion - can feel the longing heart in every word.
Lovely poem

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much for taking the time to read this :)

[Tate Morgan]

Abdul you have found the afterthoughts are telling you go get her.Be a gentleman Treat her as a queen and she will reciprocate in kind. She is for you doc tell yourself that till you believe it then become friends the the witted banter of close friends On high the streaming clouds come for you and that right quick!

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for the kind words Tate :)

[Tate Morgan]

I am not one to believe their is but one person for each of us. There are many actually. However even many amongst the billions are needles in a haystack. Don't let love and life pass you by.

[Abdul Aziz]

I totally agree with you on this one! I think the poem exaggerated my feelings a little too much, though. We're doing fine, me and her, actually. It is just that the lack of physical proximity because of circumstances lends itself to such musings.

[Tate Morgan]

Ah the aching of the young heart.Yeah I can understand that.

[Great Aunt Astri]

This is a lovely poem about an absent loved one. Perhaps she will come back?

[Abdul Aziz]

She has. Thank you for the comment! :)

[Great Aunt Astri]

Oh I am so glad to hear that! Did your poem do the trick?

[jacob erin-cilberto]

damn, those lonely nights when someone who was there is no longer...we hold our pillow...hug it and pretend..feel the scent of her...but like a feather, she flew away...

much sadness and longing here.

well penned.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you very much for the review!