Perhaps

Perhaps when night overcomes our souls  

And leaves my heart at your doorstep, 

Beating vividly its dreams for you to discern, 

Seeping its colour into every breath you inhale 

Until your happiness drips from your eyes, 

 

Perhaps when the violence of sound 

Is negated by the light in your eyes  

As you paint my drab and monochrome mind 

With the vibrancy of your thoughts 

Until your eyelashes sigh of tiredness, 

 

Perhaps when the blanket of peace 

That shrouds and shields you from the darkness 

Extends its reach to the heart at your doorstep, 

And your touch soothes it till it is unafraid, 

Perhaps, then, I might get the courage  

To tell you I love you 

 

Reviews

[Augustus]

How delightful to be reviewing you again, Abdul! I was so thrilled when i saw you online. You are the quintessential romantic aren't you? You've always had a way with words. This poem is an intricate and delicate weave of what most young men go through. This write is about the vulnerability of men: of men as lovers. The very same young men who boast of their prowess and heroic deeds to each other are as fragile as butterflies when captured by a woman.

You have used breathtaking imagery to paint an extremely noble and refined painting of love, using such lovely expressions as "violence of sound" and "happiness drips from your eyes".

There is a hint of sensuality too, but only a hint. The sentimentality of this write makes carnal pleasures look utterly banal. And then the concluding line says it all! Perhaps then, I might get the courage
To tell you I love you.

An immensely tender write, Abdul! Wonderful!

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for the very kind review, Shreyas! Glad to see you around. Has poetry caught your fancy again? I hope so, for poetry would be lucky indeed!

[Great Aunt Astri]

Sometimes it is very hard to say those three words 'I love you'. Your poem is as mystical as that! And very well written.

[Onku Ghosh]

lovely poem, aptly titled.

[Aethereal]

This is a very intense love poem that goes beyond carnal attraction. After her soul embraces your heart, then you may say that you love her. You're into mystical love, and that's the most delightful way to love. She's both human and goddess.

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for the review! I'm not really into mystical love, to be honest, even if I believe there is some magic to be found in this world. I'm more of a realist, though some times I allow my words to go whither they may.

[Aethereal]

If you ever venture from medical science into advanced Physics, then you'll find the true nature of reality to be elusive. A doctor must be a realist to some extent, but we have our limits. When we make assumptions outside of our empirical limits, we enter the realm of Mystical Insight. A large part of what makes us human is our ability to transcend our limits by way of assumptions about reality that we gamble on.

[Abdul Aziz]

Yes, I have indeed read a little about it. In the end, what we know is just an approximation of whatever reality is. By "realist", I mean I believe in the world as I see it now, without discounting other perspectives.

[Aethereal]

From the time we’re born we begin developing a mapping of our world within our brain, but a map is not the thing-in-itself. We have no choice but to use our map as we step through the fog of reality. We know that our map is incomplete in places where we gamble on a step. When we go beyond our internal map that’s based upon sense and logic, we step into a mystical realm where there may be either danger or bliss. I think that the gamble for the bliss is worth it because this is what life's all about. It’s not enough just to exist.

[Talal Hussain]

Great writing Doctor sahab :-) i m also in my final year of medicine

[Abdul Aziz]

Thanks, mate! Hope you find final year easy.

[Tate Morgan]

your life is going to be so blessed

[Abdul Aziz]

Haha. Thank you. I hope so!

[Inkeyes]

Your words splattered my mind with a variety of colour. Excellent!

[Abdul Aziz]

Thank you for your kind words.