with out you

i can hold it but my hart cant
i can breath but with out you i cant
i am in the desert alony with out you
i am but a hollow tree soulless or dead
my life is like a blind man dont know where to go
I have tasted the bitterness of life with out you sweetness

(these is me with out you)

Reviews

[Ami N.]

Nicely written, however, I did catch a few mistakes (spelling mainly). Otherwise, great poem!

[Persephone Blum]

Very strong poem. Spelling isn't very strong, but the meaning behind it is quite powerful. Very good!