' Beg Your Pardon

as i cross the landscapes,

gray of time and pain...

the same old scenario;

the same old rain!

caress the violets and...

slowly whither away;

nothing unusual, nothing's changed

a feeling mutual, visions deranged

all away... fall away

pardon my senses,

pardon my weight

pardon me...

and my departure...

i'm running late

By;

The Black Iris, Of The Luminous Imperious

Reviews

[Robert]

excellent poem, it has shades of ginsberg in the way ur oddly drawn to eash word as appose to reading each word. my critic, only for the reason that i feel it is worthless to reveiw something with out at least finding some fault, is that ur phraseing of the verses is some what off. i tend to find the flow of the poem is more solid with well versed verses haha. However this poem is kind of made from its off beat flow. and the almost rush that u put to it fits the poem

[Hannah Paige]

simple and elegantly written. all in all i think it was pleasant to read and very cute.

[YouoweYoupay]

Simple terms used to describe lonliness in a sense of beauty. Athough som wordsin the fist stanza sounded a bit over-used, all in all I liked it. My fav parts were:

pardon me...
and my departure...
i'm running late


Thank for Sharing.

[Tate Morgan]

Your work is in many ways so much deeper in the pains and joys of the soul.I take much inspiration from you.And so will need to leave more behind to you
tate

[Dark Lady Phoenix]

I really like this one! Good job!

[Chloe..Across the Unive..]

a poem of haste? or just the same thing every day...
I like it .. love the last verse..

pardon my senses,
pardon my weight
pardon me...
and my departure...
i'm running late

Chloe