Roommate

Her brew starts in the morning;
strong and black to jumpstart her day.
My brew starts in the evening;
Herbal and sweet to ease me to sleep.

Her day starts with a boy;
One she kisses but doesn't love.
My day starts with a text;
One to the boy I love but cannot kiss.

Her day ends with a story;
Back-lit and read once before.
My day ends with a song;
A faint something before sleep.

Author's Note

Thinking of shortening it to just the first stanza. Thoughts?

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i wouldn't ...this gains momentum...you would be cutting that short...i don't think it is overkill at all.

all three stanzas are very smart...great turn of phrasing here..

she has what she doesn't appreciate...i appreciate what i can't have...

as sheryl crow said..."it's not getting what you need, it's wanting what you've got"

some people never appreciate what they have...

no, i would not shorten it...

[Xayah]

Thank you very much for your input. I see what you mean about it gaining momentum, and it needed the other two stanzas. Thank you for taking the time to come review!

[Rita L. Sev]

There is no need to shorten this - each stanza speaks volumes. The second stanza really pulled at my heart... Well done!

[Xayah]

Thank you!

[Chris]

Why argue with ...success?

Welcome to WC ...you speak in tones that flow well.

[Xayah]

Thank you very much!

[Chris]

you're welcome

[zainul]

Such wonderful discordance yet such pleasant relationship.
Each individual is unique!

[Xayah]

Thank you very much for taking the time to review my work!

[zainul]

You are most welcome.
Thanks for sharing.