Hidden Within

A poem inspired by a story I read in a book about how a girl survived long into adulthood after being abused most of her childhood.

Logic circuits and switchboards deep below

Carrying messages hidden within

A mask worn long, now inseperable

Deep rose colored hues mingled with black

A torent seeking release

Judgement befalls though only internal

Anxiety bestows it's gift of fear

Perplexia and alone

Distance and abandon

Unknowing of the cause

Seeking that which....I know not

Intensity is easy

Coldness too

Moderation is foreign

And peace is unknown

Reviews

[V. K. Harris]

Battling the never ending nightmares that relive in those that have felt it, but for those that have caused such, live on with that unknowing arrival of only hell.

This is a very emotional write, well done Andrea.

[The Archangel Gabriel]

Wondeful write! I don't think that people can write enough in all of eternity about the problems that arise from the abuse of children and women in particular. I am not arguing that abuse is better or easier for men, but men are generally larger and more capable of withstanding the physical aspects of abuse.

"Judgement befalls though only internal
Anxiety bestows it's gift of fear
Perplexia and alone
Distance and abandon
Unknowing of the cause"

That is a wonderful description of the difficulties of being abused as a child. They say that child abuse often retards emotional growth by a few years, especially trust and intimacy issues.

Is this Hell? WTF is wrong with people, here? Just because you CAN do things like that is not a justification for actually making them so. I understand that this plane of existence is likely to be "overcast with some human suffering" for all of eternity, but it need not be a continous class V hurricaine!

Great write! Wonderful topic. We can either ignore the problems, or we can talk about them and shoot for improvement. :)

-Gabe

[Danielle Asher]

I do not know why, but when I was reading this and then for the second and third times, I was thinking for a title and all that popped into my head was the word Calm. the idea that all these things were hidden from anyone that could see her. Nobody knew she was abused and that her mind was dealing with it. She was now inseparable from the mask but a mask nonetheless. You use words like Hidden, deep below, the rose colored glasses, and the seeking... all things which indicate that it is inside of her. So Calm or something like that meaning nobody else knows on the outside anything but Calm but inside is the storm, the torment. Okay I don't know if that is helpful at all. But it was nicely writen and simple which I like. And I love a good brainstorm. Hope it helped. peace,Danielle

[Wolfwind Words]

interesting, but pease? isn't it supposed to be peace? i'm not sure what to make of it, but i like it!