chapter 1

Morin And The Young Lady

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After eating his lunch Morin went to sleep on his tree house, he had eaten the fruits and had a fish, after ten minutes he was fast asleep.

And then after 4 hours he woke up and walked down from the tree house and then he collected a yellow colored big bag on his shoulders easily which was so heavy that an average person could not carry it. Then he sat down at his regular place where he used to be and opened the bag, 

And shouted “fresh fishes, fresh fishes” there were dozens of blue rin-kas and ari-kas kas (the variety of fish which were from the kukarichi kingdom) 

and Morin was now feeling more active after having a nap, he was happy that he will make more money today because of the mei-kukume market (weekly market), the people were very friendly in miki-chifu(Morin’s home city) but after the war at maruchi nobody speaks more with others.

And that he had made a lot of money and now he was on his way to home so he was packed his bag and the bag now was easy to handle though still 2-3 dozens of fishes were unsold.

 After he packed the bag and he heard a noise, a man was shouting

“Mirimoshi mirimoshi, rikutano“(thief thief, please somebody help)  

Morin turned his head to look and see what was happening , a young woman was running with a katana in her hands , Morin thought probably she had stolen a katana from a blacksmith’s shop.

 She had a bad time running with the katana because form a very distance anyone would say that the katana was heavy, 

Daily fights and robberies were usual in miki-chifu (Morin’s home city).but from many days nothing special was happening in the market it was like all thieves and gangs were like not in the city. Morin was also known for his other business.

 He used to capture wanted criminals and earned bounties on their heads and from a while he hadn’t done something risky so he tied his bag on a tree and then he ran to catch the young woman. For a woman young enough like her couldn’t run faster so Morin thought that it must be an easy hunt. 

She wore a red shirt and trousers, it was not normal in kukarichi (the heavenly kingdom of east) her hair were grey golden in color as the color of golden ash. Her shoes were not like any other; one could easily tell that those shoes were from a noble family.

 When Morin looked at her shoes he thought “she must be from a noble family, then why is has stolen the katana maybe, she have just robbed the shoes from a noble” 

but when he looked at her hair he whispered in his mind”certainly she must be a noble because noble tied their hair in shikitoji rika-kishi style (ring shaped style)”

 And her color was not so fair , it was a little dark shade not very much dark. And she certainly was a beauty after running behind her.

at last Morin grabbed her shoulder and then she looked behind and said “arimota teki-kushi-ari “(which means the soldiers are behind us ,leave me) at last he catch the band from which the katana was tied to the shelf, she looked behind the last time now her stolen sword was gone, so she quickly moved her feet and because of the sword’s weight and from running so long Morin was exhausted  the mimonos (cops) at last caught Morin then 

Morin told them the whole story then , Morin took the mimonos to the blacksmith, and then Morin handed over the katana to the blacksmith ,certainly he was very happy so then he pulled out another sword from the shelf which was tied to his belt , it was the same as the katana which Morin handed over to him.

And Morin respected the blacksmith so he accepted the sword.  

Then Morin looked at the sky it was almost dark the sun was now going down and the sunset was very b beautiful, the most beautiful sunset can be seen from kukarichi kingdom (the great heavenly kingdom of east). The sunset was so beautiful that other heavenly kings used to visit the king of kukarichi for experiencing the sunset.

When Morin came near the tree where he tied his yellow colored fish bag which was known as lukiariri zukaji was not there, “probably someone has stolen my bag” Morin whispered.

He was very sad because he lost all his earning but he was happy that he got a precious katana though it doesn’t seems to be special as you look to his katana he pulled the piece of cloth which he had tied to his head o prevent from the heat and sunlight then he tied the katana below his abdomen, he was tried and was feeling sleepy again.

He had made plan for tomorrow to rest but because of the money now he had to go for fishing tomorrow morning, as he was returning to his home it was almost dark enough that Morin could not see anything before him then after walking a little more he saw a hut, 

                                                              the tree house was still a mile to go so he decided to rest at the stone hut, he have not seen any hut through his way to home but still he was not worried about it because now he had a katana he could easily kill anyone with one or two strokes, 

he entered the hut but nobody was there and soon he was fast asleep. Morin love sleeping for hours, he actually was active although he was fast asleep, a slightest noise can be heard through his ears.

Reviews

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

Aatharva, I used the Katana already in one of my stories 'Requiem' (already posted some chapters here on WC). It's a dangerous weapon in the hand of those who can handle it. Good story so far, but you certainly have to look at spelling and grammar issues. There's a lot of good programs to be found on the internet like 'Paperrrater' and 'Grammarly'. With those programs, you can find a lot of spelling and grammar issues in your writings. I use them too because English is not my native language and I'm very pleased with it. It brings your story to a higher phase. Keep writing, but relook at your writings, run them through one of these programs, you will certainly be surprised how they can help you in your writings. :) Rudi

[Aatharva Banaitkar]

okay i will use it

[Shubham Joshi]

Actually you are trying to tell a story which I think I am really going to love but the fact is that with your english you have turned it into a bullshit. Things seem out of place. You better just remove the grammatical errors and also stop using then or atleast reduce its use and then you will be able to tell a better story. Other than grammar there are spelling errors also, see to them. And one personal advice, read a lot of english novels if your english is weak or atleast to improve the writing style. It will help you become a great writer.

[B]

Very intriguing and i want to read more

I like how it flows nicely and is full of suspense

I like it