my greatest gifts

the world of empty bottles

it is now my time to change

the world

two bottles are my companion

each bottles accompany 

my hands

and it will give me 

the same joy 

which i will get 

after changing the world

because of the world

i have changed many times

but now its my time

to change

and my two bottles are enough to support me 

i will not feel the pain

when i am drunk

and also i will not feel tension

these bottles will be my medicines

throughout my journey

but when i have changed the world

when the world will bow to me

these bottles will be empty

no other bottles will end my thirst

what time it will be 

the whole world will be under me

but it will not have the potential

that could fill my thirst

for the world i have given my best companions 

that world is now useless to me

i had the most wonderful gifts

which i sacrificed for the wealth

but this couldn't overcome my thirst

then i will be like my empty bottles

waiting to filled again 

and the same bottles which i have 

wasted for conquering the world will be left alone

still the tune of my empty bottles still rings in my mind 

and the bottles are left to be filled again

and then 

someone will appear and fill those bottles

to change the world again

Author's Note

what do you think about this?

Reviews

[Bushra Naqshbandi]

Firstly I'll apologise for not being able to read this earlier. Actually I'm having my final exams so it's been a little difficult to manage my time.
Now for the review.
The poem is very meaningful, genuine and striking. Well done! :)
The beginning is abrupt like Donne (which means it's awesome) and we learn about the subject from the first line only.

''two bottles are my companion''
Since the bottles are two it should be ''companions'' and not ''companion''.

each bottles accompany
Since you've used each you have to use the singular form of bottle and similarly change accompany i.e. Each ''bottle accompanies'' . Or it could also be written as ''Both'' bottles accompany.

''because of the world
i have changed many times
but now its my time
to change''
I just loved these lines. Remarkably done! :)

''what time it will be''
As I'm guessing you're talking about the time when you'll rule the world. If yes, then it should be ''what a time it will be'' because if you don't use ''a time'' then it appears as if you're asking at what time your wish of changing the world will come true. If that is you intention then the sentence is perfectly alright.

''that could fill my thirst''
''Quench my thirst'' would be more appropriate here as ''fill'' is generally used with hunger not thirst.

for the world i have given my best companions
that world is now useless to me
These are heart touching lines. They are reminders to others not to give importance to wealth over the love of people. Amazing lines. :)

and the bottles are left to be filled again
and then
someone will appear and fill those bottles
to change the world again
The ending is perfect. It simply tells that one man may change his way of thinking but mostly people will continue to strive for wealth and honour in the world. It is a caution against going the same way as you've gone disguised as a simple comment. Hats off! :)

The poem is beautiful in every respect and something we can all connect to and learn from. Thank you for sharing this. Keep posting! :)

[Kousika]

Life can't be predicted.. Life is empty and we go behind and turn up everything to look it..
My thoughts..
But it is so good..

[Rudi J.P. Lejaeghere]

I think, to be very general, the truth never can be found inside a bottle, magical or not. I think experience can be obtained by living it. Being alive and to taste, feel with the senses we've got will give us an image, a picture of what live really is. Otherwise, a soulmate who can fill the needs in you is always a good solution too. :) Rudi

[B]

Cool

Very elusive

The bottles have a very strong presence here