Rhythms of Love

We all have experienced that feeling of falling head over heels for someone. Here is a short poem for all those who fall in LOVE a little too hard and with everything they have got.

May be that is what God tends for me,

Because somehow all of my heavens constricted mainly at your alley. 

"I am yours till the last breath of mine" is what my ears pound to hear,

"The heart beats with the rhythms of your breaths"

"The divine rhythms of your love spirits have held the fragrance of my presence in sublime" 

Utterance of such is all the future I see. 

Author's Note

This is my first poem. Please tell me how you feel. Modifications, Critics, Discouragement, Encouragement, Improvement and everything else is welcome. :)

Reviews

[Dr Sunita Agrawal]

The sentiment and the emotion in the poem are good, but I feel we should do justice to the style called poetry which is characterized by a rhythm and flow

[Inked_Memory]

Thank you so much! Will definitely work on the flow. :)

[Inked_Memory]

And I would love to ask you to see my next ..!😊

[Dr Sunita Agrawal]

pleasure shall all be mine!

[vspjaguar]

Feelings well expressed in your poem. Your poem can be even better if there a nice flow to it. Well done for your first.

[Inked_Memory]

Thank you so much! I hope you see the difference in my next peoms. Thanks alot. :)