Escape

You tried to run...

Run. Run. Run.
Don't trip on the cracks in the sidewalk.
Run. Run. Run.
Make sure your footsteps aren't loud.
Run. Run. Run.
Keep breathing-
Keep running-
Keep-

Reviews

[Osephyr]

This invokes the image of those chasing nightmares and is similar to your haiku "The Chase"; makes me curious why you are expression that kind of emotion in two of your poems that you published on the same day. I digress, the repetition is a good way to express anxiousness, likewise with the overuse of punctuation. I do think though that the haiku was better at expressing the emotion because that's the format that aims to have as few words as possible. There is very few unique lines here and I find that the poem suffers a bit because of it; it seems to me that the poem only offers an expression of the emotion anxiety but doesn't really give anything other than that; what about anxiety, why do you want us to feel that way? There isn't anything wrong with having a simple goal like that but having so few lines will most likely result in the reading understanding that the poem is portraying that emotion but they won't actually feel the emotion themselves.