Rape

sadness dampens her pillows
inside and out
each comforter
loses its softness
and clout
yet
she's forced to find comfort
without

everything south is
soaked in tears
and premature sweat
her fear
has left evidence
a stain
on
sentiments of a self
to blame

ashamed of a child
she's now forced
to abort as the
first and last resort
a thought
she
uses as closure to an entry forced
wide open

shut from the world she trusts
hoping for something
taken abrupt
from someone still
infant enough
sweet
innocence turned sour
devoured

and cut by the sharp edges
of a love
she used to lust
after before laughter
turned sore
ignored
with each deep emotion
stored

a price she was forced
to afford
with no credit
for stature or esteem
thus a fetish
captured much of her
preteens
spent most of her time dreaming
deep dreams

sinking to the depths
of a shallow pool
of someone else's sweat
she sees scenes
drenched in regret with
colors
she bled in silence as a sign
of respect

Reviews

[Goddess Sophia (filomen..]

"She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect."

Very powerful line, complicated the entire piece for me. Evoking in me my own rage, my own pain. Innocence robbed from a youth, I would imagine this to be an incestous rape. Ashamed of child....gave me this thought.
You evoke alot of pain here...and you as a man have penned from the womens perspective with great passion. I am perplexed with the respect....aspect in the end...i want to know why she would have bled with respect....I am curious...who is it she was respecting...see i am all twisted up in this last line...
And maybe you intended this...
Thank you for the invite. Peace

[Jeff "jazzman"..]

This a very powerful piece, the flow is amazing.

"Sinking to the depths
Of a shallow pool
Of someone else's sweat.
She sees scenes
Drenched in regret. With
Colors
She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect"

Excellent work!

[Ilene M.W. Lush]

few words when crafted by an artist are all that are needed to tell a story. and you are an aRtist.


and these words leave me speachless. thank you

ilene

[Nicole M. Isabella]

this is fantastic...you captured so many emotions in just one piece...the shame, guilt and fear that is found in the aftermath of rape...what i loved most about this piece...you took a subject that most of society wants to pretend does not exist...but...is as common as breathing...you tackled it ...and did it with taste...not turning to the old cliches...kudos to you
much respect,
N*

[H. A. M.]

Heavey. I like the way you worded this.
"Each comforter
Loses its softness
And clout." Nice one right there.
Her fear
Has left evidence, The purportratory.
I like this because you don't blatantly say anything to discribe the act and you don't tip toe around the thoughts she's having. But I'm really liking the way you wrapped it up.
She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect.
You don't even imply that the rapist could be a step-father. I personally think it's become cliched.If you had done it like that this wouldn't have lost points with me but I'd have that step-father image in my head. It could have been any one but when I read it I got the sense it was some one she might have known. It's a good read and well versed!

[Bubo]

Ashamed of a child
She's now forced
To abort, as the
First and last resort.
A thought
She
Uses as closure to an entry forced
Wide open.

Very powerful raw piece of writing..........written with amazing imagary, deep sadness that shines in your words, her vulnerability, pain and the aftermath, that she lives with. You are a very good writer, to evoke emotion such have you have.