Rape

sadness dampens her pillows
inside and out
each comforter
loses its softness
and clout
yet
she's forced to find comfort
without

everything south is
soaked in tears
and premature sweat
her fear
has left evidence
a stain
on
sentiments of a self
to blame

ashamed of a child
she's now forced
to abort as the
first and last resort
a thought
she
uses as closure to an entry forced
wide open

shut from the world she trusts
hoping for something
taken abrupt
from someone still
infant enough
sweet
innocence turned sour
devoured

and cut by the sharp edges
of a love
she used to lust
after before laughter
turned sore
ignored
with each deep emotion
stored

a price she was forced
to afford
with no credit
for stature or esteem
thus a fetish
captured much of her
preteens
spent most of her time dreaming
deep dreams

sinking to the depths
of a shallow pool
of someone else's sweat
she sees scenes
drenched in regret with
colors
she bled in silence as a sign
of respect

Reviews

[Goddess Sophia (filomen..]

"She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect."

Very powerful line, complicated the entire piece for me. Evoking in me my own rage, my own pain. Innocence robbed from a youth, I would imagine this to be an incestous rape. Ashamed of child....gave me this thought.
You evoke alot of pain here...and you as a man have penned from the womens perspective with great passion. I am perplexed with the respect....aspect in the end...i want to know why she would have bled with respect....I am curious...who is it she was respecting...see i am all twisted up in this last line...
And maybe you intended this...
Thank you for the invite. Peace

[Zach Is Speaking Again]

I haven't seen a poem like this featured, ever, on this site. I respect the feeling that poured into these words, and makes them a sweet & bitter liquour.

[Goodbyeguilt]

It is indeed very powerful, you seem to understand in specific detail how it is when someone is the victim of abuse. I appreciate the way you have taken great care to explain the emotions that come afterwards in a sensitive and delicate manner.
It had a good flow that made it a pleasure to read, the rhyme scheme was also very cleverly written.
It is only a pity that the subject matter could not have been a more positive one.

Well done on the write.

GBG - Leah

[Jennifer Warnock]

Wow...that's very powerful. I loved every word. You got my attention. The poem is just too powerful for words. You did a great job on it. I could feel sadness and hopelessness through out the poem.

[David P. Eckert]

Very well done. It seems to me that you take the perspective of a male friend or older brother or cousin seeing a young woman changed by an assault, a horrible thing with lasting repercussions. As you point out


And cut by the sharp edges
Of a love
She used to lust
After. Before laughter
Turned sore.
Ignored
With each deep emotion
Stored.

While you refer to a rape, there is also part of this story as you tell it that suggests that this rape might also have been incest, or something similar. I say this both because of the reference to the abortion being the first and last choice and your reference that she is "shut from the world she trusts." You've done an excellent job in exposing what needs to be brought out into the light, the ongoing effect of rape and incest too on women and men.

David

[Thug Life]

I agree with the previous reviewer. It's like you was momentarily inside a womans body while goin thru this horrible thang we call rape. The poem was a hard-hittin, sad reality of the world we live in. If i said great imagery, that wouldn't do ya justice. OUTSTANDIN write

[Jadarae]

There are very few men, who can take a topic such as this and make it not only readable, but your words were like you lived it for her. Not many men can write the way a woman feels about such a topic. This was done with the utmost respect and excellence. Proof of a true poet. This moves to the favs. I thank you.

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

Man this is really intense. I dont know what else to say other than its a sad but wonderfully written poem. Its a terrible subject and taboo to many So I say kudos for writing this my friend.

[Jinx]

Powerful... intense... damn. You are gifted, Art... truly. I haven't a lot to say, which in this case... is a good thing.

[Jihadic Flowetry]

great and powerful peace we must fight for those who have gone through the hells of rape
im puttin this one in my favs
keep up the fight

[Blue Bard]

Great. I love the part about comforters and pillows. How innocence is taken and life pushes choices on us that forbid innocence. The last line an excellent coda to the piece. All in all, I thought it was excellent writing. Good work.