Rape

sadness dampens her pillows
inside and out
each comforter
loses its softness
and clout
yet
she's forced to find comfort
without

everything south is
soaked in tears
and premature sweat
her fear
has left evidence
a stain
on
sentiments of a self
to blame

ashamed of a child
she's now forced
to abort as the
first and last resort
a thought
she
uses as closure to an entry forced
wide open

shut from the world she trusts
hoping for something
taken abrupt
from someone still
infant enough
sweet
innocence turned sour
devoured

and cut by the sharp edges
of a love
she used to lust
after before laughter
turned sore
ignored
with each deep emotion
stored

a price she was forced
to afford
with no credit
for stature or esteem
thus a fetish
captured much of her
preteens
spent most of her time dreaming
deep dreams

sinking to the depths
of a shallow pool
of someone else's sweat
she sees scenes
drenched in regret with
colors
she bled in silence as a sign
of respect

Reviews

[Goddess Sophia (filomen..]

"She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect."

Very powerful line, complicated the entire piece for me. Evoking in me my own rage, my own pain. Innocence robbed from a youth, I would imagine this to be an incestous rape. Ashamed of child....gave me this thought.
You evoke alot of pain here...and you as a man have penned from the womens perspective with great passion. I am perplexed with the respect....aspect in the end...i want to know why she would have bled with respect....I am curious...who is it she was respecting...see i am all twisted up in this last line...
And maybe you intended this...
Thank you for the invite. Peace

[Rebekah Michaele]

strangely, the first stanza was my favorite. the place we identify with comfort has become her terror, and the sensation is all too familiar.
powerful piece. somehow i can't bring myself to use the word 'wonderful' or 'beautiful'... it is, to be sure, astonishing. sensational. you have a way of gently yet firmly presenting a very sensitive subject in truth. the harshness and sense of brutality were reined but still very evident. bravo.

[Susan M. Fenn]

Oh wow... wow.. this is wonderful. Well written, nicely versed.

[Blogiudi]

Wow. What a moving piece. Well written. The stanzas are an easy read, I like that. I can't imagine having to go through such an awful thing.

[Scott Casale]

A very difficult subject so powerfully and sympathetically written.

Great Write, rough read (for subject matter).

[Debra Stevens Edwards (..]

The pain and fear in these words you express, strike fear in the hearts of every woman alive.
extrordinarily done. The flow of your word touched my soul.
Debby

[Anna Marie]

The flow of this poem was amazing. It grasped my attention and held it. The subject matter was also an attention holder. It was written with such deep emotion. You word choice and beat of the poem were great. This was my favorite stanza:

"Everything south is
Soaked in tears
And premature sweat.
Her fear
Has left evidence,
A stain,
On
Sentiments of a self
To blame."

Your work is amazing. Thanks for sharing it. -Anna

[Matthew Marquis]

This was a sad piece, indeed, but feels very controlled. It feels like you wanted to be more raw than ou are but held back - because of the subject matter, perhaps? This is beautifully written,don't get me wrong I just wished more of the brutality and grreif of the event would have been made more obvious to me. But I'm an idiot who knows so little about poetry to begin with, so I'll shut the hell up.
Matthew

[Bri]

I love how it rhymed but without a steady rhyme scheme. It really made it more three-dimentional. I like this poem a lot.

[Rhan F. Sydney]

Beautifully Dark.....I relate in some ways to this and I feel a pang of self-damnation whilst I read this...I love it.

[Rose Downing]

I like the flow of this piece. You are able to make the meter natural, and fit well and yet skip a beat every so often. It's not easy to do that, and have the poem keep your attention. Wonderful work!