Rape

sadness dampens her pillows
inside and out
each comforter
loses its softness
and clout
yet
she's forced to find comfort
without

everything south is
soaked in tears
and premature sweat
her fear
has left evidence
a stain
on
sentiments of a self
to blame

ashamed of a child
she's now forced
to abort as the
first and last resort
a thought
she
uses as closure to an entry forced
wide open

shut from the world she trusts
hoping for something
taken abrupt
from someone still
infant enough
sweet
innocence turned sour
devoured

and cut by the sharp edges
of a love
she used to lust
after before laughter
turned sore
ignored
with each deep emotion
stored

a price she was forced
to afford
with no credit
for stature or esteem
thus a fetish
captured much of her
preteens
spent most of her time dreaming
deep dreams

sinking to the depths
of a shallow pool
of someone else's sweat
she sees scenes
drenched in regret with
colors
she bled in silence as a sign
of respect

Reviews

[Goddess Sophia (filomen..]

"She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect."

Very powerful line, complicated the entire piece for me. Evoking in me my own rage, my own pain. Innocence robbed from a youth, I would imagine this to be an incestous rape. Ashamed of child....gave me this thought.
You evoke alot of pain here...and you as a man have penned from the womens perspective with great passion. I am perplexed with the respect....aspect in the end...i want to know why she would have bled with respect....I am curious...who is it she was respecting...see i am all twisted up in this last line...
And maybe you intended this...
Thank you for the invite. Peace

[tigerclaw]

This is very strong. The pain came through and you painted such a vivid picture of this person....

[Penulis Kecil]

I have no words. This was stunning.

[Misty Blue Eyes]

you did an out standing job with this Art! great great work

[justjenn_2u]

So profoundly deep and an inside journey of a torturous event that took place. As hard as rape hurts, you capture the mental ruin it causes.

Perhaps she feels she is stuck with a scarlet letter for the rest of her life. She is stronger now.

You hit a subject that may be hard for some to swallow, but a harsh reality driven poem here. I like your empathetic nature in this poem.

[THE LOST ROSE]

You know i often think about my own existence because I was told there is no imformation on my birth father and my skin complextion. I was adopted at the age of 3 months. I was told does not match that of my birth mother age 13 and grandparents. Maybe I am a product of a rape who knows but I often think of that. Man your work is inspiring thanks. If you get a chance can you read and review my poem that "Lost Rose".

[Jemal]

ok. let me be the lone voice of dissent. I like it, I think, but I hate the ending. the last two or three verses don't fit the powerful beginning or rather the middle. it leaves me disjointed and guessing about what happened and speculating on whether she herself was a child and whether it was the rapist fetish or one that she developed because of being raped. And respect for the rapist? why?

So i'm left lacking closure. it is thought provoking but in the wrong way. I donzt want to be guessing and thinking about what actually happened. I'd rather be focused on her loss and her pain and even her resolve to carry on despite it all.

[Brette Medb]

This was very powerful and saddening that this happens in real life. The rhymes were powerful and I liked how you split up the sentences into different lines. The first stanza however doesnt flow with the rest of the poem because the rhyme seems forsed. The pain and suffering was so strong through this it leads you through the whole poem holding your breath... great write.



Blessed Be

[Faciallyblessed]

Damn Ras this is some real hardcore thoughts put together spelling masterpiece. I really respect this writing and I would like to understand it better. The last line read "She bled in silence as a sign of respect," what does that mean? I kinda had two different meanings in mind and I would like for you to clarify it for me.

[I Quit The Cafe For Awh..]

What a perfect piece of written beauty.Your words are powerful and a painfull pleasure.This made me cry. I found out 6 years ago that i was raped, but my outside self cannot relate because it happened to me over 20 years ago, and my feelings haven't caught up yet. You touched on a subject that no one does. Thank you

[Ms. Unheard Voice]

I have friends and family who have experienced rape. You captured every aspect of the horrible experience people face and your ending was very deep.

She bled in silence as a sign
Of respect.

Wow. I'm stunned at how good this was. Great job!!