Protecting Spirit

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The dusty hallways

Do not echo when I walk

But I still listen for footfalls

It is not my own I hear

 

Your footsteps echo

Against the filthy floor

I am attracted

To everything about

You are young

Beautiful

So feminine

 

You remind me of her

 

I gave my heart to her

Her amaranth lips

And diaphanous skin

She needed me and I

Thrived as her

Guardian angel

 

We died together

Here, surrounded by stone

But only my blood was spilled

Seeping into the stones

Mingling with the foundation

 

She moved on

Where I don’t know

But she is not here

I know this

I can sense this

Yet I remain

And when you pass

Through my halls

I am drawn to you

 

I MUST protect you

There are dangers here

Evils that hide

In the darkened hallways

That spelled my death.

 

The first girl

Was pushed

Did not fall

The second

Strangled

And in that instant

I thought

 

You remind me of her

 

It was then I knew

The evil that kept me here was intent

Intent on keeping you

Just as it keeps me

 

I will not let

You face my fate

It is not right

 

So I protect you

And in return

I am blessed

Because your beauty

Sustains me

Replenishes me

Fills me with life

Or power

 

Life and power and force

Are

One and the same now

The power

To save you

To move objects

To touch livings

And have them heed me

 

So I use my power

My life

Or un-life

Or afterlife

Whichever you prefer

To protect YOU

Because

 

You remind me of her

 

And I let her die

And I cannot live through that again

Or die in that again

Because

I loved her

And

 

You remind me of her

Reviews

[Andrew'sWonderland]

A great little story inscribed within a great little poem! This is such an amazing write! Wonderful work!! :)

[Poeticpiers]

An interestin piece of free form writing not my favourte form but you held my interst

[Alex R.]

I like how it doesn't go into alot of detail. good poem.

[Gary The Hat]

I like this, it seems to be filled with a sense of sadness and yet a glimmer of hope.