Sleep

My sun

We are climbing frames
skyscrapers, dormant lumps under the blanket for you
to clamber up and
topple from

proudly pronounce
DA
DA DA! When one tired eye
cracks open and crinkles at the corners
smile hidden in the duvet
as yours beams full force so close and I
bury my face between shoulder blades
as one long arm emerges ahead to sweep
you wriggling
under the covers
and your grinning face pops up above me
so ready
for me to help
excitedly greet the coming day

little legs kicking to propel you back over dads
softly snoring form. 6am

Reviews

[Wondering Mind]

Almost 6 am here, and now, after reading this lovely poem, my insomnia doesn't feel so bad.
Thank you for bringing a smile to my heart and awaking dormant, sweet memories.. They grow up so fast!

[caesarkreshen]

and your grinning face pops up above me
so ready
for me to help
excitedly greet the coming day

little legs kicking to propel you back over dads
softly snoring form. 6am

^ I like that and it strangely ends well on '6am.'

[alanwgraham]

I like the style of this a lot. It takes me right back to those days that passed so quickly and that is the mark of good poetry.
Well done.
Alan

[free will]

ha ha I love it..That right there is what is so special about having children, and you wrote this in a way that I myself can relate to, and I know others do too. Well done!

[James O'Rourke]

I absolutely love this piece!

The language and imagery are perfect. The mood and rhythm set up the action taking place and give a real sense of peace (aside form the whole being attacked by a miniature human at 6 in the morning). I really enjoyed reading this one. Honestly I've read it about 4 times now and I hadn't been able to respond in the manner I wished. However, I feel that any response, regardless if it is how I imagine myself saying it, would be well received.

Thanks for sharing! I hope to read some new stuff from you soon. Keep up the writing!

[MCS]

Oh I miss those moments
Well done :)

[sereenaoutloud]

aww this totally tugged at my heart and made me smile both at the same time. Got to love those moments! Such a great write!

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~~ oh... william... william... william... you are pure magic... :)

~~ i haven't read such a delightful poem in a long, long time... thank you for this mommy dearest... i can't stop giggling... :P ~~ do give him a cuddle from his aunt here in india... :)