Cold night but

The blood pulses
softly
through me
drawn to the surface by
the sun resting lightly on the skin
I’ve carefully chosen to
leave uncovered
palms and feet
neck and face lifted
catching the energy
calling it down, down
to my heart
beating into fingers and
toes
tingling with the power
of the air
resting against me, exhale
deflate
smoke all through it
Dissipates like negativity does
when I notice the earth
breathing up through my feet,
lean back and
shut my eyes

Reviews

[Hanna McGivern]

I like how I get the feeling of coldness but at the same time I'm feeling so relaxed and in tune with the world. Your line 'when I notice the earth breathing up through my feet...' it made me envisage someone meditating or a child standing in the garden with bare feet, when you take the time to just feel the earth below you it makes such a difference to feeling relaxed.

[caesarkreshen]

I like the way the rhythm goes, the sound, it seems at every turn there is a body part.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

you know mal, i especially like this..because i like the cold and it is exhilirating to me...

it revives me...this poem is refreshing....

nicely written...i felt the cold through your imagery.

[Mockingbird]

sounds like you're leading people in meditation and getting them focused. great job.

[Subterannean]

You seem to have a really sound grasp of meter and rhythm in your poetry.

[SilentVerses]

The rhythm of this piece is delightful, delicate and sweet. The words you have chosen compliment this delicacy and add layers to your work, I adore the imagery you have portrayed, the rhythm lends to the picture you paint and allows the reader to see it with you, breathing the poem in it is fresh and crisp. The length is perfect I simply love it, you do not push the words appear as though they fell from your fingers and this lightness allows your poem to float in grace. Well done beautifully written

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. oh, this is so beautiful ... you've captured the beauty of the universe in the universe of this post ... outstanding poetry ... stunning beyond stunning ...

[tekphobik]

This makes me appreciate life as a natural being. It would be nice to live constantly in the feeling you've painted

[Kenneth The Poet]

I have missed your works.