Gone

When your presence is taken for granted its time to go.

I warned you that I would leave,

And doing so hurt like hell.

But the truth darling is,

That I'm the kind of prisoner

Who loves their cell.

I warned you that I would leave,

On a cold, early dawn.

But the truth darling is,

That you were the one

Who was already gone.

I warned you that I would leave,

And I meant every word.

But the truth darling is,

That your borrowed time

Feels like a sick reward.

I warned you that I would leave.

The idea is not appealing,

But the truth darling is,

That asking for a kiss

Shouldn't feel like stealing.

I warned you that I would leave,

And the moment arrived.

But the truth darling is,

That only time will show

Who died and who survived.

Reviews

[Ngawang Tibet]

Your poem has depicted a very beautiful word of your heart. Easy to read and understand. Thanks for sharing your creativity!

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks for reading and your kind words.

[sette]

such a sad poem about love and its drawback the biggest one i guess the pain of loving someone so hard

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you for reviewing. It's nice to see that my work is relatable.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i am gone...now, now, now, do you notice me when i am not there?
being taken for granted is absolutely the worst feeling in the world...
the repetition you use in this drives home the point so nicely...it is haunting.
i like your "in your face" kind of poetry....you slap the reader in the face with it...and we feel the sting.
j.

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you. I'm honored that you liked it. Good to hear. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

I felt the struggle and I liked the honest tone. You made the reader believe and feel your words and your emotions. Sometime we must escape, even with great debt left behind. Thank you my friend for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks as always for reading. :)

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.

[Chris Shaw]

These lines remind me of that old saying 'cutting your nose off to spite your face'. I get the feeling here that the author is going to suffer more than the other party. A one sided relationship. The repetition works very well here. The last stanza is poignant. I think I know the answer.

Chris

[@_av_poetry]

Lovely review Chris. You hit the nail on the head. You couldn't have been more accurate.
It still amazes me how much someone can see into words and that's why I'm always more hesitant to publish poems that are close to my heart. I feel exposed like an open book. Thanks for reading.

[Chris Shaw]

The fact that I hit the nail on the head means you are a bloomin good poet. You said it and I felt it. Please keep publishing those poems and telling it like it is. You are good at it.

Chris

[@_av_poetry]

It means a lot that you're saying that. Thank you.