Deep End

A poem about the bravery of diving in the deep.

Love is a dangerous sea,

And you, you fool,

Thought you were good at swimming.

Some people survive the deep end

And some of them, most of them

End up the surface skimming.

Love is a dangerous sea,

And I, the fool,

Thought I was beyond saving

Some people blindfolded dive

And some of them, poor them

End up the water craving.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

I love the way you use the extended metaphor of deep dangerous waters. Good balance between using strong imagery & conveying a powerful message. It's interesting how you use these two phrases: "surface skimming" and "water craving" -- these are the passive forms of verbs, which are often not considered to be as dynamic as if you used the active form of the verbs (skim the surface & crave the water). But for some reason I like the way the passive form sounds haunting & indirect! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[@_av_poetry]

I'm very glad you liked it. Thanks for taking the time to share your thoughts. :)

[jacob erin-cilberto]

we need to have life preservers for jumping into that sea of love.
j.

[@_av_poetry]

Indeed. Thanks for taking the time to read.

[R.J Calzonetti (Siniste..]

Excellent poem. The image of an unloving deep abyss under a deceptively bright blue watered beach being a lot like love is entertaining and well done. The poem is short, and yet it feels like you've said a lot. People like you make me so happy to learn a thing or two from another writer. I greatly enjoyed the read.

[BlackPrince]

I love your writing style. Your words are full of truth, lessons and wisdom, in a spirit of a true poet. You are economical with your words, saying only what matters, rather than filling the gaps for the sake of it; whilst staying true to concept, content and context, with a certain command of your craft. You have a grasp of the imagery you wish to depict, and thus the effect intended.

I like your stanza structure and simple yet effective use of rhyme, rendering the poem rhythmic and smooth flowing.
I like how you used the word 'fool' like an artist's motif, a musician's hook. in an objective way of looking at others and yourself as 'fool' for love's woes.

Yours is a voice of humility, truth, love, experience and wisdom.
Your poems are inspirational, and I am glad to have come across you.

Well done!

[@_av_poetry]

Wow thank you. It means a lot to have my work praised so much. I just write what feels right and only abide to the basic rules of writing enough for it to make sense. It's not me who writes really, these words just flow from an unknown place. Thanks

[Coyote Poetry]

I agree dear Poet. Dangerous sea lead us to the unknown.
'Love is a dangerous sea,
And I, the fool,
Thought I was beyond saving"
I believe, we can be saved, only if we want. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry.
Coyote

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks for your kind words.

[Coyote Poetry]

You are welcome my friend.