Letting go

A brief poem meant to give comfort for those who grieve loved ones. A flutter of hope in a world full of unknowns that maybe death is not the villain in this story after all, but a letting go.

Don’t pray for me,

I’m too far gone.

Don’t shed for me any tears.

I’m riding clouds.

I own the stars.

I’ve conquered all my fears.

I broke my cage.

My shackles melted.

No reason now for crying.

Just say goodbye,

And let me go.

I’m free at last, I’m flying.

Reviews

[jacob erin-cilberto]

and maybe what is after was welcomed...sometimes life is not what we hoped...or we are suffering so much physically or emotionally or we are mentally gone...and death comes like a dear friend to pick us up and take us away...Or a gentleman...like in Dickinson's "Because I could not stop for death."
j.

[BlackPrince]

Though brief in execution, your poem speaks volumes on a universal scale, touching on a subject that concerns us all.
You certainly give voice to the departed, with an optimistic comfort to console the bereaved; saying that death might not be the final sad end at all but a continuum in the affairs of the universe, though in a different realm and frequency.

Well done!

[Coyote Poetry]

I do understand these words.
"Just say goodbye,
And let me go.
I’m free at last, I’m flying."
I was a runner for 37 years. I did get caught. Thank you for sharing the amazing poetry and your thoughts.
Coyote

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you for taking the time to review.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

A wonderful, lilting and uplifting piece of rhyming poetry. The message is also an important one as many hold on to grief as though people are meant to live forever.

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you for reading. Glad you like it.

[barleygirl]

I really love this, becuz I also see death as a release, a reward for getting thru this crazy stint called life. I love your uninhibited expression about a topic many depict in a downer serious way. I watched old classic movie Grapes of Wrath (Steinbeck) last evening, when gramps dies, the preacher says he's more worried about those still living so let's celebrate that old gramps doesn't have to deal with all this s**t anymore. This is very parallel to your message (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

[@_av_poetry]

Thank you. I appreciate your review. I haven't read the book or watched the film but I've heard of it. I might do now. :)

[barleygirl]

Only if you enjoy those old black-and-whites . . . I find them hard to watch becuz we've been spoiled by High-Def!

[Jibey]

I love the brisk pace of this, turning the moment of parting into a celebration of freedom.

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks for reading. I'm glad you like it. :)

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

Beautiful makes me think of when
I broke free from my toxic emotional
abusive marriage because peace came
in and I eventually found me again.

I broke my cage.
My shackles melted.
No reason now for crying.



Just say goodbye,
And let me go.
I’m free at last, I’m flying.

[@_av_poetry]

Wow I'd never thought of that side of it to be honest. I'm glad you found it relatable and of course I'm glad you're free now. Thanks for reading :)

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Oh yes I felt as if I was a bird in a cage with shackles upon my soul and heart I was trapped
so almost losing yourself makes you think. But there's all forms of freedom and breaking away. Thank you for sharing yes I am also I'm separated still trying to divorce but I'm having my 40th birthday today and I'm quite happy ☺

[@_av_poetry]

Happy birthday. Keep fighting for your happiness. It's the onlye thing worth fighting for.

[Benita-Staebell M - KindredPoet]

Thank you yes true 😀

[emipoemi]

Another gem!! Musicality is supremely on point, imagery is strong, and the progression is fantastic. You're getting the hang of it, for now you're raising the bar with each new piece (probably too soon to say so, but I have faith that it's the case). The only two suggestions I have for this are:

-"No reason "now" for crying" (better sound and sense)

-"So let me go" (the "And" doesn't really transition well from the first line. I get exactly what you're doing, but only because I'm one of the few who dissect poems when reading them. At first glance, the "and" is a bit jarring because "just saying goodbye" is spouting intention, and the second doesn't add anything directly to it, so the "and" is awkward. The "so" is perfectly because it reflects that you just want everyone to move on and whatnot).

Apart from those two minor aspects, this is amazing and really blew me away! Especially Stanza 2 - wow!! Well freaking done!