Godless

Disclaimer: This is not a religious poem and this is not a an anti-religious poem.It's a poem about humans thinking they're better than everything else on Earth. It's about hope of change.

In a world where God is absent,

Humans take the upper hand,

And it makes them feel immortal

And it makes them feel so grand.

In a world where God is missing,

Humans think they own the planet.

When the only choice they have,

Is the marble or the granite.

In a world that’s God forsaken,

Beasts fight beasts to take control,

And when the fighting’s done and over,

They’ll be looking for their soul.

In a world that God created,

Humans think they have all rights,

That the earth belongs to them,

Just because they gave it lights.

In a world that God has blessed,

Humans try to make a claim,

All the while blindly ignoring,

What true monsters they became.

In a world that God adored,

Still some kindness slowly burns,

And the ones providing kindling,

Quietly hope that God returns.

Author's Note

Which one is your favourite stanza that leaves an impression?

Reviews

[DreamCatcher08]

This flows so perfectly. It is a very "Musical Poem", in the sense of its rhyming structure, which happens to be my favourite. An amazing description of the human condition and our tendency for selfishness. Thanks for writing!

[Lyn Anderson]

what I get out of it is that we're damned if we do and damned if we don't -- theocrats and atheists alike -- we're all flawed.

[@_av_poetry]

Exactly. God is only a metaphor for what is good and kind in this world. It's not about religion. It's about the human species pretending to be God. Thanks for reading.

[emipoemi]

It all leaves a grand impression. But Stanza 3 and 6 just hit it way out of the park. I would suggest that a "the" be added to Line 3 of the third stanza for better sense ("and when THE fighting's done and over"). Stanza 5 Line 3 has some minor musicality issues, also. But overall, this is amazing!! Well freaking done!.

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks for taking the time to review and your advice. I'm glad you liked it. :)

[emipoemi]

my pleasure.

[John Alexander McFadyen]

I liked stanza 2 as it made me laugh with its sardonic inflection. The poem felt rather tight despite the fact it flowed well and contains a message. Sometimes rhyming becomes the reason d'etre rather than a natural occurrence thus the writed forces the words into the rhyme. Free verse is worth trying. So many here don't even attempt rhyming poetry as it is a difficult discipline.

[@_av_poetry]

Thanks for your review. It will be taken into consideration.