Nightmare Realm

I walked until I reached a valley,

 

where storm clouds crashed upon the earth.

 

The horizon stained a vibrant red

 

reflected the blood from my dripping hands.

 

I wondered where the people went,

 

for not a soul dwelled near.

 

I searched the trees whose leaves were knives

 

and found only creeping silence.

 

My blood soaked hands brushed the grass

 

and painted crimson in my wake.

 

I headed east towards the dawn

 

for a place to dry my hands.

 

Author's Note

Just something I thought of in math class because writing is better than getting ready for exams

Reviews

[PurpleQuartz]

I hate math, I fear it will be my doom! :D
I really like this, I like the creepy feel of it and how all the colours are so vivid!

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks! I think my hatred of math inspired this!

[bryandc15]

I can picture the message of this poem ...... thanks for sharing ....

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!

[AWickedMoon]

An exceptionally poem I love the imagery!

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!

[K.G]

lmao ^ i get more inspiration durring school too. . . . this is very interesting.

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks!

[Phillitup]

I feel like I have an obligation to write a bigger review than the other people. Although all of them are thoughtful they lack a certain question that I have forming inside my mind as I type this to you. They focus more on what you were not doing at the time. Words like imagery and detail were thrown around when describing what you had included in this write but I feel like there is something deeper in this. Let me explore for a moment.
Suggestions: None. As far as grammar and spelling (etc.) is concerned I didn't see anything of "interest" meaning that I have nothing to truly suggest. Nothing else besides that. The flow is nice and I feel like the words fall into place.
Mood: Gory, nervous, dark, eerie. All around creepy feel.
Comments: I"m not sure if you meant it to be funny but the last couple of lines comes off that way to me. Am I crazy? I have no clue why I feel that way but in the moment of it the one true concern of your character is to wipe off their hands. Not hide the body or even kill it for that matter. The character walks around the place just thinking of wiping off their hands. Truly and honestly this was very nicely penned. Best regards, Dell

[Alexa Tasch]

It wasn't meat to be funny or really even that deep, but I was pretty angry when I wrote it. And I kind some pretty gorey and evil thing funny and looking it over, I did kind of get that impression. It was more like wiping away the bad and looking for a fresh start

[Alexa Tasch]

Thanks for the review!

[Jesse Jacques]

whhooaaa....very red.

[Alexa Tasch]

lol thanks!

[Amber Tasch]

beautiful imagery! you do your best work in math^^

[Alexa Tasch]

I really do don't I?

[Faffy]

hahaha math must have been pretty damn boring for you to punch out something this good! =P

awesome write!

[Alexa Tasch]

lol math is always boring! And thanks I'm glad you liked it!

[C.C. Marx]

Oh alexa, never paying attention in class i see! or maybe its just math :P haha well let's just say i got a couple lovely mental pictures I'm now trying to push out of my mind. Damn your wonderful imagery!!

[Alexa Tasch]

I aim to torture you! It keeps me up at night and distracted in math class :)

[C.C. Marx]

Ahh I knew it!!!! I'm unsure whether to happy u care enough to torture me or kinda disturbed

[Alexa Tasch]

both

[C.C. Marx]

So should I start sleeping with a fork under my pillow for safety percautions???

[Alexa Tasch]

oh please I'm smarter than the average fork. Now spoons, those kill me every time

[C.C. Marx]

How about a spork? Those things are pure genius

[Alexa Tasch]

Sporks are servants of the devil

[C.C. Marx]

I beg to differ, handy utensils, those things! They lift like a spoon and pierce like a fork, you cannot get a more genius idea

[Alexa Tasch]

Knives. Knives are a great idea

[C.C. Marx]

Yes but we are speaking in nonviolent terms right now! If it was rated on the violence scale, knives would win

[Alexa Tasch]

you ever eat pudding with a knife? knives win

[C.C. Marx]

Why who I ever voluntarily stick a knife in my mouth you crazy kid??? That makes no sense unless like eating the extra nutella off of it

[Alexa Tasch]

I eat a lot of food with knives. Pudding, apples, peanut butter, marshmallow fluff, the list goes on. and you know what I eat with a spoon? Nothing! You can drink soup and lick ice cream. Try doing that with a steak. knives win

[C.C. Marx]

I use a spoon because I like not burning my mouth on soup and having to lick ice cream out of a bowl, excuse me!!!

[Alexa Tasch]

thats why you blow on the soup to cool it off and eat ice cream cones

[C.C. Marx]

I like it my way thank you very much

[Alexa Tasch]

ok fine. I guess I cannot force my will upon you

[C.C. Marx]

Exactly I am my own person, well besides the fact we have most things in common becuz we are twinning

[Alexa Tasch]

Everyone is their own person, well excpet for conjoined twins

[C.C. Marx]

Yes so you can have you strange aversion to spoons and I will have mine to ovens

[RachelReaper]

looks like you have a bit o blood on your hands. The imagery in this was nice and gory and fun!

[Alexa Tasch]

"gory and fun!" a good combination! Thanks!

[RachelReaper]

ikr! XD