Ghostly Seas

I tried for something dark, but I kept hearing pirates singing in my head....

The seas that wash upon the shore

Are all dyed pink with bloody gore

We fight and fight and fight some more

Until we reach the ghostly shore

 

The seafoam surging like a storm

An omen of sirens swimming near

Waves are crashing among the rocks

And deadly singing we can hear

 

We're sailing along the poison sea

Of sirens tempting us with their songs

But an ocean grave is not for me

And so we keep on sailing on

 

Sailing into port one day

I met a lass with hair of gold

She tried to tell the men my crimes

But not a soul was ever told

 

I added her head to my treasure trove

The deck is all stained in red

So hoist the jolly roger high

And we'll go visit Davy Jones

 

We've got tight ropes around our necks

But here we laugh and drink some more

And sing a song of rape and murder

As ghosts we'll sail forever more

Author's Note

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Reviews

[Jesse Jacques]

this is pretty freakin awesome

[Alexa Tasch]

ha thanks

[Jesse Jacques]

welcome

[RachelReaper]

JACK SPARROW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *fangirl screams* sorry, that's what this reminded me of. anything with pirates and I'm fangirling over Jack. Anyways, you really captured the pirate's carefree spirit about not caring how much they sin. Koodos to you

[Alexa Tasch]

fffffffffffffffffffffffffffffffff Jack Sparow!!! LOVE HIM!! Do not apologize for love him! Thanks for liking this!

[RachelReaper]

it was quite an awesome topic

[Alexa Tasch]

Thank you!

[K.G]

you should enter this into a poetry contest if you can, this is reallly good as well. . .its like your poems are getting better and better every post, keep up the good work.

[Alexa Tasch]

Thank you!

[K.G]

your wellcome love!

[Becca Bishop]

Man, I'm so glad you listened to the pirate voices inside your head!!! This is spectacular!!! I'm a sucker for anything pirate so as soon as you mentioned that...yeah :P The only thing that really bugged me was how your rhyming scheme changed. Sometimes it was all rhyming, sometimes half of it was rhyming, sometimes nothing was rhyming. I don't know about everyone else, but I'm not smart enough to process that. But it still worked out so maybe you should leave it....
I loved the last two verses :D :D :D :D they really portrayed the nature of the narrator.
Yippee!!! I finally read a decent pirate poem!!! MY LIFE IS COMPLETE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

[Alexa Tasch]

Thank you! I'm so glad you liked it. Not everyone liked the piraate theme. I did the rhyming scheme like that because I was toying around with some new techniques. Edgar Allen Poe did that too so I thought I would give it a try. Thank again for the review! :)

[Amber Tasch]

Well I have to disagree with Mr. "speak my mind" below. this was an amazing poem! the word choice and rythm were spectacular and you couldn't have done a better job!

[Alexa Tasch]

thank you! And I don't mind constructive critisism from my friend amarlaksh. I am honestly not a hugh fan of the second to last verse. But thanks Amber!! :D

[Amber Tasch]

oh thats his name? that black bar thing blocked it out when I reviewed this the first time XD

[amarlaksh]

Neither, i liked the first verse very much, but the 2 ending verses weren't soo good. I speak my mind so don't be hurt rather then improve yourself further on. Keep writing

[Alexa Tasch]

thanks for the honest review. The first verse was my storke of genius so to speak and the rest of the poem was built off of it. The end is a little rough

[Tex]

i liked it... when I lived closer to the ocean many years ago we would get something called "red tide" it was an algae bloom that turned the water red. this piece reminded me of that.

Very good write. Nicely done.

[Alexa Tasch]

Thats sounds neat! And thank for the review!

[L. Catherine]

"Yo ho, haul together, hoist the colors high! Heave ho, thieves and beggars, never shall we die!"
Sorry, but that's all I could think about while reading this. Really impressive work you got here Alexa! I kept thinking about Johnny Depp too :P All in all, good work!

[Alexa Tasch]

I know!! After i read it a second time all I could think of was johnny depp and the hook and then guyliner

[L. Catherine]

OMG YES!!!! Gotta love Hook

[Alexa Tasch]

Obviously!

[L. Catherine]

So much guy-liner!

[Alexa Tasch]

and it is nice

[L. Catherine]

Agreed

[Dr. Wood ?]

Well I liked it....It needs cutting a bit to make it scan better in parts but It is still pretty damn good

[Alexa Tasch]

thanks!!