Mistake

A sonnet about my mother

A mother's mistake,

borrowed straight from the grave.

A pathway of heartache

beneath my feet is paved.

For my own poor mother's sake

I built my own trail of tears.

And oh, what a shaming mistake.

This road held all my worst fears.

The pain can not be escaped

if you are your mother's mistake.

Author's Note

Did I do the sonnet correctly? Also, do I have good vocab. or do I suck?

Reviews

[Cody Jeremy Thompson]

Sonnet contains 14 lines and is usually written in a 4-4-3-3 pattern . Now about the writing itself. It has nice tone overall and I like the way its composed but i think you could add to it and make it have more impact. Its nice the way it is but if you add some lines that'll both fill the 14 line quota and add to the feeling it could be great. Long story short: good but could be better if you work on it a bit longer.

[Owen Aldin]

I don't know a great deal about sonnets but enjoyed the piece. It feels like it has some link to what you mentioned in your bio about becoming a child psychologist. You sound like you have a very reflective mindset which will take you far. I partially agree with the comments below about how you are expressing yourself and maybe as people read more they will get more insight into you as a writer. I imagine there is some much more you are feeling inside that is waiting to come out!

[Willard Wells]

Your never at fault or a mistake, but too some with no compassion and love you will feel defeat. The future is yours, so inspire and promote yourself. Nicely done. Stay strong.

[wizardlypoet8]

thank you!