Im the girl your mom warned you about

Some girls should come with a warning label on them :)

I’m going around stealing hearts,

Because my heart was broken abruptly.

 

I collect these sad, damaged, barely beating hearts,

Because he has mine in the palm of his hand still.

 

I’ll play your pitiful pathetic emotions like chess,

Because he played mine oh to well.

 

I’ll chew you and spit you out like raw food

because he used me and left me mangled

 

I dance around the truths of my love to you

Because he knew far too well that the truth is to cliché 

 

I’ll look into your eyes and swear we’re true

Because he eyes held a disguise of white lies

 

I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces

Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough

Author's Note

Was inspired by a song to write this , Also needs to write more

Reviews

[KillerWithWords]

Fantastic. The content here is raw and perfectly unseasoned.
"I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces
Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough"
This last line is a little discerning.
Because your character is taking part of the very cycle that destroyed her....

[TheSweet]

When I read the title, I was more assuming of a 'natural bad girl' kind of theme. But seems that this girl has been wronged - therefore it's not all her fault. I'd be more inclined to try and help her than avoid her :P

[Rasputin]

Frankly, if my mom HAD warned me about girls like you, I'd be disappointed, because that would mean that she could have spent that time warning me about actual dangers. The title lead me to believe that this poem would be about a serial killer, or at least a disease-ridden hooker (come to think of it, my mom never warned me about hookers). Girls who "steal hearts" aren't dangerous- they're just nuisances.

[Tabitha t]

this was cute. something most women will understand. you are never right again after that first major heartbreak and even I wanted to go around using and abusing people afterwards. I enjoyed this and it brought up many scenarios that I grinned at. good job well written

[writingurl14]

wow... i think this is a sad poem but also well written

[Layla J Omorose]

Good job...the "to" in "truth is to cliche" should be "too". Other than that this was a very good poem and reflects how many people feel not just women but men as well when the one we loved and trusted betray us and break our hearts.

[Owlgirl]

Smooth flow, well written, great job!

[Amelie]

Nice flow of troubled thoughts from a troubled heart. a tit for tat in teens these days. I enjoyed it, nice write.

[S. Michael Long]

this is well done, only advice i can give would be change to with too (: nice write -s

[w]

nice back and forth, but not quite there IMO.