Im the girl your mom warned you about

Some girls should come with a warning label on them :)

I’m going around stealing hearts,

Because my heart was broken abruptly.

 

I collect these sad, damaged, barely beating hearts,

Because he has mine in the palm of his hand still.

 

I’ll play your pitiful pathetic emotions like chess,

Because he played mine oh to well.

 

I’ll chew you and spit you out like raw food

because he used me and left me mangled

 

I dance around the truths of my love to you

Because he knew far too well that the truth is to cliché 

 

I’ll look into your eyes and swear we’re true

Because he eyes held a disguise of white lies

 

I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces

Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough

Author's Note

Was inspired by a song to write this , Also needs to write more

Reviews

[KillerWithWords]

Fantastic. The content here is raw and perfectly unseasoned.
"I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces
Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough"
This last line is a little discerning.
Because your character is taking part of the very cycle that destroyed her....

[Anthony Q Armstrong]

Really good, only thing in the 6th stanza it should have been 'Because HIS eyes held a disguise of white lies.

[stars are far]

This was so great. i love how ypu showed power in it..
you did a great work.. well done

[kayla]

This is really good. Very emotional with great stanzas(:

[Tomislav Petricevic]

Dark and perhaps a bit twisted (XD) but it's really awesome!
Keep it up! (both writing and stealing hearts xD)

[Dez H.]

damn thats cold blooded

[Erika Jones]

I can understand this all too well! It actually started making me cry :'( Love it though!

[WickedPenWielder]

This song had some bits that reminded me of certain song lyrics. It was good and can show how horrible a girl can feel after heartbreak...and some peoples desires to make others feel just as horrible. Well structured.

[Lina Grey]

I can think of a number of songs that would lead to a piece like this, but the poem is in itself an excellent piece. True, a mother should warn about fakes, but a girl like this isn't really fake, she's broken. I'd help her myself, not avoid her. I do really like the ending stanza, it's a very strong close. Thank you.

[Poetic Beauty]

Many times we do things because we have been hurt ourselves. We may do it on purpose or we may do it without realizing that we are doing those things. I like how the first line describes what you are doing and how the second line describes what he has done to you.

[Iamnothingnew.]

Loved this. In this you really show how ruthless girls can be when someone breaks their heart.