Im the girl your mom warned you about

Some girls should come with a warning label on them :)

I’m going around stealing hearts,

Because my heart was broken abruptly.

 

I collect these sad, damaged, barely beating hearts,

Because he has mine in the palm of his hand still.

 

I’ll play your pitiful pathetic emotions like chess,

Because he played mine oh to well.

 

I’ll chew you and spit you out like raw food

because he used me and left me mangled

 

I dance around the truths of my love to you

Because he knew far too well that the truth is to cliché 

 

I’ll look into your eyes and swear we’re true

Because he eyes held a disguise of white lies

 

I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces

Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough

Author's Note

Was inspired by a song to write this , Also needs to write more

Reviews

[KillerWithWords]

Fantastic. The content here is raw and perfectly unseasoned.
"I’ll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces
Because he thought 2 pieces wasn’t enough"
This last line is a little discerning.
Because your character is taking part of the very cycle that destroyed her....

[KurKota]

I am finding your phrasing skill outstanding.....the last stanza is very, very effective. This is my second piece of yours I have read, and I am becoming very fond of your style and abilities. Another good writing.

[Nick.B]

This is raw, dark and emotional, interesting piece about how pain can make you another dark character that has fallen...anyway great job

[soliloquy]

This one sounds like a song to be sure. It has an important and all to familiar message too.

nice.

[soliloquy]

This is powerful emotional writing....

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

This is good(: I like it a lot xD

[Simmirose]

I Love this. It reminds me of the song F****n King of the World by Porcelain and The Tramps. Loving the rawness of it. Amazing Job!

[Patricia B. Hepler]

Raw emotion portrayed as venegance. 'I'll rip your heart out in a thousand pieces Because he thought 2 pieces wasn't enough'. Good work. pat

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

The old what comes around goes around... it is easy to want to close off the heart but then you are not really living. I did enjoy the write though.

[John Stussy]

Why people tear others to shreds after the same has been done to them is beyond me, but I'm guessing it is an attempt to replace the hole where their hearts used to be. Just as unfortunately, there seem to be a ton of people resigned to being used and let it happen. Love is such a complicated mess. Good poem though, captured the chaos and lies that goes with that emotion well.