I See Perfectly.

No one understands why I can paint the world with words.

I dont need eyes to see what this world is really like.

I see perfectly.

But nobody understands.

Author's Note

Yeah i dont know. I still dont like it enough to fix it.

Reviews

[Anthony Q Armstrong]

one word: Amazing, and in other words, don't stop ur writing

[The Watcher]

I can understand clearly just what you're trying to say. Sometimes we poets can only describe the indescribable through our writings, but not everyone will understand what we mean at first. Nonetheless, this is good how it is. Great work, and kudos to you.

[Pax]

no, this is enough already.. short and great that speak so much.

[Maraline-Elijah]

i definetly get your way of thinking on this one. no one sees the world the way you do. no one understands your line of vision. i get what it is to have a view of the world that no one gets. i see everything the way they are layed out without feelings getting in the way.

[DiMar4u]

Don't touch it..it feels just right as is; as it is, I understand it.

[Aarontastic]

I like it. It's a short and simple poem, but I still think it's good. I think that you could improve it by cutting out the last verse and fleshing out the concept at the heart of the poem a little more, maybe by adding a couple more stanzas, or even just another line...

The poem seems to me to be about how you can bring to life the real world in words the way that another artist could do it with paint. The reason that you and other poets can do this is because your conception (or "sight", as you refer to it metaphorically) of the world isn't actually based on sight or derived from what you can see, but your *understanding* of the world. That's why you 'see' perfectly--because you understand perfectly. That's deep.

So yeah, I would abort the last line that ends the poem and replace it with some additional verses or stanzas that flesh out the main idea behind your poem a little more. As it is now though, I really like the style you used because it's declarative and matter-of-fact, and I loooove the title; it really grabbed my attention.

[JadeForever]

I absolutely love this! No editing needed. I enjoyed the first line the most because I like the way it was formatted and the text "paint the world with words" This poem showed me multiple emotions/feelings. Well done! :D

[The Winter Grey]

Really, very good. You say a lot with a little here and it works quite well, there's no need to add anything to it.

[Kaylor Mason]

I think it's cool. No one really sees perfectly--everyone has a different view, no matter how much they try not to. As long as you're content with your vision . . . well, what else matters? What makes other people think their vision is true, anyway?