What did i do wrong?

You’ve hurt me                                  wouldn’t be the first

Abandoned me   

                            Its not like i needed you                                     

Ignored me     

  let my mind wander to far out truths

Denied me                         

        stoped me from loving you longer 

 

You say you still love me

Want to rebuild our relationship

Want to apart of my life

Care for me again

Im the sorry sucker

I keep taking you back

People say “He’s the f*****g worse“

I don’t wanna believe it but you keeping leaving

 

I want to have you  love me again

And actually hug me when the pain is to much

Hold me when i cant hold back the tears anymore

Tell me everything will be ok, when its not

 

Daddy what have I done wrong,

For you to do this?

Author's Note

First stanza got fucked up, sorry

Reviews

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

Makes me curious..... :3

[Patricia B. Hepler]

I spent my life begging for my daddy's love; he could only share what he could. I finally had to accept what he had to give was all I could have. Execellent topic, interesting form, well written. pat

[J. E. Letan]

Serious emotions are always key for poetry. Really good its just too reminiscent of every girl I know who falls for the Taker, Destroyer, and Breaker. Happens though.

[deepblue04]

This is amazing! I like it!

[Maraline-Elijah]

awww woman this almost made me cry! I know i can't relate completely but I definetely understand in a way. I love you!!! no one can replace your dad but somethings are done for the better and i think what you did was the right thing for YOU. theres only one person you can trust in this world *cough* me. :) you didn't do anything to deserve the way he treated you. anyways i love the poem, very emotional.

[Amila Jay]

Excellent write :))

[Coyote Poetry]

Hard to be kind always. I raised four children. My kids test me and I will push back. The poem is very sad. I had a AWOL father. I forgave him and we were great friends till his death. As adults we learn life is hard. Sometime we must seek a peace and hope for a good ending. A strong ending to a outstanding poem. Made me think.
Coyote

[Rhea752]

I actually love the first stanza it sets up the poem and it kept getting sadder and sadder with each one and you left me in shock when you told us that it was the father. amazing job

[Tai Ryens]

You had me at awe with the ending, I expected a significant other to be causing such pain, not a father. You've expressed such immense sorrow and pain perfectly, I empathized with a lot of the words here and felt the emotions conveyed here. Amazing job.

[Sleeping Maiden]

Wow! now, i'm in awe! this is so amazing. i love the structure of your poem. it's refreshing and unique. The pain is also well expressed! The ache.. the..sorrow... the anger. I felt the abandonment so well... it hurts my heart! Fantastic piece!!! Well done!