Love you, Hate your girlfriend

It hurts hearing you talk of her. 

How you spawn over every aspect of her motives.

I wanna blast music in my ears and never hear the inflation in your voice. 

 

I've been with you the whole time.

Seen all those girls who broke your heart. 

 

Your perfection attracts the w****s,

Your kindness ignites their desperation. 

 

You fall for their lies.

Your in bliss until her diguise fades.

Your hurt and say you'll never do that again. 

 

Theres not kind way to say this but

I love you, Hate your girlfriends.

 

These girls are like hookers,

And your heart is their money.

 

Your after true everlasting love

They want a fling or

Just to make their ex jealous.

 

 

Author's Note

hmmm need to add more

Reviews

[emman]

The emotion is there!wow! I love this poem :)

[realmwriter]

Needs a little work but has a good start. Enjoyed reading it.

[Earthy Mumma Soul]

Great little poem , maybe just work on the ending a little but really enjoyed reading

[Tomislav Petricevic]

I think I can relate to this, in a way.
I think you've done a great job with this poem, but I agree with you - you should add some more. Perhaps just one more stanza, to create a powerful ending.

[Beautiful_Nightmere]

Good job(: I like it! Gives me strong imagery which makes me think of w****s which makes me mad haha but i like it! Good job(:

[Leslie Philibert]

What I like is the way you have worked in some original elements to a common situation, the penultimate verse is excellent, a poem full of power and bitterness, good work.

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the honest and direct words in the poem. People, we care for. Give us concern and sometimes pain. A very good ending to a outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Poetic Beauty]

ahh a bit of jealous and longing entwined in to one piece. Sometime you have to take the first step be brave and open your mouth. Speak how you feel or one day the moment maybe gone never to return.

My friend did this all th time, I counted her a little dumb for it.

I like it it made me understand some people a litle more.

:O)