Love you, Hate your girlfriend

It hurts hearing you talk of her. 

How you spawn over every aspect of her motives.

I wanna blast music in my ears and never hear the inflation in your voice. 

 

I've been with you the whole time.

Seen all those girls who broke your heart. 

 

Your perfection attracts the w****s,

Your kindness ignites their desperation. 

 

You fall for their lies.

Your in bliss until her diguise fades.

Your hurt and say you'll never do that again. 

 

Theres not kind way to say this but

I love you, Hate your girlfriends.

 

These girls are like hookers,

And your heart is their money.

 

Your after true everlasting love

They want a fling or

Just to make their ex jealous.

 

 

Author's Note

hmmm need to add more

Reviews

[DrD]

Cold simplicity is often the best form to address themes and you do that very well. I enjoyed reading this.

[Maraline-Elijah]

it could use some more to it but i love it. the situation in the poem is so relatable, being befriended into the black hole of the dreaded friend zone while you watch the person screw up and miss the person best for them.

[Sabrina Marie]

My heart has been screaming this poem all along... hmm.

[The Winter Grey]

This was terrific! There were one or two places where the grammar could have been sharper, but this poem is still so very raw, honest and relatable. The title is perfect, the first verse really hit home, and the wordplay in the sixth was pretty brilliant. If you add anything, maybe add one good final verse/stanza to tie it all together. But even if you leave it completely untouched, I loved it.

[johnnyqueer]

I've been in this position so many times, you've captured it perfectly!
Awesome write.

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The bluntness is what gives this a razor sharp edge. Now I love you and hate his girlfriend.

[TurtleClark]

thisis really good and i hope that you add more soon

[Simmirose]

i really like this poem i like how direct you were about your emotions. i also agree that you should add more but this was great!

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

Loved this piece. I have felt that way about some of my friends girlfriends. That is just how it is. Girls can be petty golddiggers. They don't love the guy for thier hearts, but they love them for the money. Many girls can be like that. Your friend just needs someone that actually cares. Thanks for sharing.