This is stunning. It makes me think of someone who has mental illness and is quite happy living in their delusional world. It is a place of comfort and easier to manage than real life and when others want an explanation as to why you would want to live that way there is no answer that they will understand. This is what I saw reading this piece.
nicee oneee. i like the way you put it on a page. it makes it seem like it is an argument with the space between the lines. it creates a different feeling as in more prominent
I think the pessemistic aspect of this one breaks it a little bit. I like the 'me and them' feel to the story - but the layout kinda feels more like bullet points to a fuller poem than a poem itself.
Dunno if you know what I mean here, and I by no means mean to be harsh - the concept of the piece is fantastic. I just feel it could have been fuller, if you understand what I mean... To make it really stand out from experimental works.
Hope you understand my meaning. Thanks for sharing :)
Gosh, i can really relate so well with your writing! It's magnificient. Full of strength and inspiration.. it's also very honest. i love how you write! Keep it up!
This piece seems to have ways to be taken. and i like that. WHy give explanations to people when they won't understand anyway? Love this so much! Well done!!