Fragments, Shards

Fragments, Shards

A Poem by Perfect Mistake

Thats what i am now

Incomplete

They keep asking for

truths.

Im afraid to give them

answers.

I keep hiding behind

dreams.

Except maybe they're 

realities.

They keep asking for

reasons.

I give them lame

excuses.

I want to live in my

fantasies.

Expect maybe they're

nightmares.

They keep asking for

explantions.

I keep telling them

I dont have them.

© 2012 Perfect Mistake


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Perfect Mistake
You read it left from right...

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This is stunning. It makes me think of someone who has mental illness and is quite happy living in their delusional world. It is a place of comfort and easier to manage than real life and when others want an explanation as to why you would want to live that way there is no answer that they will understand. This is what I saw reading this piece.

Posted 12 Years Ago


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nicee oneee. i like the way you put it on a page. it makes it seem like it is an argument with the space between the lines. it creates a different feeling as in more prominent

Posted 12 Years Ago


WOW this poem is full of emotion the poem is quite simply Wonderful. your work never ceases to amaze me keep it up

Posted 12 Years Ago


This is awesome. I love the title and the way you set this up. I like the mysterious feel and I too am to comfortable in my head. lol Excellent work.

Posted 12 Years Ago


I think the pessemistic aspect of this one breaks it a little bit. I like the 'me and them' feel to the story - but the layout kinda feels more like bullet points to a fuller poem than a poem itself.

Dunno if you know what I mean here, and I by no means mean to be harsh - the concept of the piece is fantastic. I just feel it could have been fuller, if you understand what I mean... To make it really stand out from experimental works.

Hope you understand my meaning. Thanks for sharing :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Maybe things are just better inside your world? You just GOTTA be...

Posted 12 Years Ago


Gosh, i can really relate so well with your writing! It's magnificient. Full of strength and inspiration.. it's also very honest. i love how you write! Keep it up!
This piece seems to have ways to be taken. and i like that. WHy give explanations to people when they won't understand anyway? Love this so much! Well done!!

Posted 12 Years Ago


I like this poem, it both makes sense when you read it left to right or right to left, either way, very creative and very good :)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Dar har what if someone read it from right to left?

This is overall very creative in the style I was all excited. Great read I read it more than once.

:O)

Posted 12 Years Ago


Actually, I read it from right to left, and bottom to top. Also, I read each individual word backwards. It was weird.

Posted 12 Years Ago



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Perfect Mistake
Perfect Mistake

Denver, CO



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