Tell Me

It was a poem I wrote out of overflowing feelings.I thought it was my first feeling this emotion that's why I wrote a poem .I know it's not that good but i just want to share it..

I want you to know
what I really feel today
so that those words
those words would come
out from your mouth..

I feel like my heart
would burst,
it's beating so fast
that I feel like I'm running
I'm running out of breath

Wont you please,
tell me what is this?
This is the first time
I've encountered this feeling
This can't be ..
or could this be..

I didn't believe
this feeling of mine
for so long
I thought this don't exist
but you've proven me
yes you've shown me

And because I know
I couldnt say it for now
i couldnt let somebody know
could I keep it a secret?

Could Ilike you from a far?
Could i admire you from a distant?
Could you tell me
is this..
is this...

Love??

And I'll pretend
you could hear me
I'll pretend
You exist in  my world

And pretend..
pretend...
you said yes..

Reviews

[FelicityAllona]

_nice!! .. i really don't know what to write here because i exactly know who you are talking about ^^ (and i also like him one,you know that)

first i'm so happy you're already a member^^

this poem is full of emotions... i am really happy while reading this.maybe because i know who are you talking about ^^


XD

well organized


love,
akira_chan

[Manpreet]

Vow lovely poem!

[Thea]

Oh my...Did you just read what's in my mind?! XD
This really speaks it all...Yeah, I know that feeling, I'm not as well sure if it's love but you know that strange heart beat whenever you're with that particular person. It's hard to imagine what kind of feeling it is...The ending made my heart ache a bit, just ouch...
Haha! Sorry for the drama! Anyway, I really like this, the emotions flowed so well and you said, it wasn't that good? Come on, this was totally great! Never underestimate your work! You did an excellent job here...
I'm going to put this in my library! Heehee!
Thanks for sharing...
:)))

[Jordan's Back]

This has Loves longing, wanting needing The passion is just as strong weather you live 5 mile or 5 million miles.....Excellent work

[Becky Clancy]

I like it (:

[Coyote Poetry]

Great expressing of love and hope. Need both to know happiness. I like the flow and the questions in the poem. Questions of love and emotion are a on going thing in a life. I like the ending to the excellent poem.
Coyote