Tell Me

It was a poem I wrote out of overflowing feelings.I thought it was my first feeling this emotion that's why I wrote a poem .I know it's not that good but i just want to share it..

I want you to know
what I really feel today
so that those words
those words would come
out from your mouth..

I feel like my heart
would burst,
it's beating so fast
that I feel like I'm running
I'm running out of breath

Wont you please,
tell me what is this?
This is the first time
I've encountered this feeling
This can't be ..
or could this be..

I didn't believe
this feeling of mine
for so long
I thought this don't exist
but you've proven me
yes you've shown me

And because I know
I couldnt say it for now
i couldnt let somebody know
could I keep it a secret?

Could Ilike you from a far?
Could i admire you from a distant?
Could you tell me
is this..
is this...

Love??

And I'll pretend
you could hear me
I'll pretend
You exist in  my world

And pretend..
pretend...
you said yes..

Reviews

[FelicityAllona]

_nice!! .. i really don't know what to write here because i exactly know who you are talking about ^^ (and i also like him one,you know that)

first i'm so happy you're already a member^^

this poem is full of emotions... i am really happy while reading this.maybe because i know who are you talking about ^^


XD

well organized


love,
akira_chan

[Robbie~xoxo~]

How can anyone deny this unequivocal desire?... This is written with a bursting heart of longing... always a pleasure to read such vibrant emotions. Nice write!

[BlueDreams]

A poem of burst feelings .. The feeling of being with someone only in dream and pretending that dream as a real life .. Its a killing hurt.. Great poem .. :-)

[Cassie Fraga]

loving in distance.... very deep with questions, you expressed very well in this write. and the flow of it is beautiful!! GREAT JOB!!

[Nicole]

You carry the theme strongly in this work. It's a very beautiful piece. Great job!

[Rene Velez]

A love from afar, sometimes the love that is structured in ones mind is far more precious than a love that may never be...rejection is a cruel mistress...good one.

[House of Immite]

I can't really fall for this. Yes the ending has potential, only if placed in a different poem.

[reflectingus]

This is something I can totally relate to. All the questioning perfectly portrays that confusion felt, or, wonder. And I loveee the ending! :)

[A Red Red Rose 4 U Luv]

Wow, i really really like this. This is a great example of hope in love! the ending is really nice, great poem :)

[Regrets]

Really enjoyed reading this piece.

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Amazing write, enjoyed reading this