Tell Me

It was a poem I wrote out of overflowing feelings.I thought it was my first feeling this emotion that's why I wrote a poem .I know it's not that good but i just want to share it..

I want you to know
what I really feel today
so that those words
those words would come
out from your mouth..

I feel like my heart
would burst,
it's beating so fast
that I feel like I'm running
I'm running out of breath

Wont you please,
tell me what is this?
This is the first time
I've encountered this feeling
This can't be ..
or could this be..

I didn't believe
this feeling of mine
for so long
I thought this don't exist
but you've proven me
yes you've shown me

And because I know
I couldnt say it for now
i couldnt let somebody know
could I keep it a secret?

Could Ilike you from a far?
Could i admire you from a distant?
Could you tell me
is this..
is this...

Love??

And I'll pretend
you could hear me
I'll pretend
You exist in  my world

And pretend..
pretend...
you said yes..

Reviews

[FelicityAllona]

_nice!! .. i really don't know what to write here because i exactly know who you are talking about ^^ (and i also like him one,you know that)

first i'm so happy you're already a member^^

this poem is full of emotions... i am really happy while reading this.maybe because i know who are you talking about ^^


XD

well organized


love,
akira_chan

[Rheeca Verons]

Hello, remember me?

Wow. This piece sounds like a song. I dunno why but it does look like one.

The poem is beautiful. You've actually expressed the way you feel for the guy. The hope that someday he'll notice you. (too late for this since it's been what? like two years?) A sad person fighting her way to live in this mad world without being mad like herself. hahaha. cx

[Maan]

A humble poem, seems to me like its been written by some scared heart, a part broken. If so, then your words have totally expressed it all. Um the poem, its really nice. I like the eloquence in your writing. :) Good Work.

[Revolutionary]

sweet and tender.Sorta Sad but sorta reassureing.I like it.

[Blue Ivory]

A few grammatical errors. But other than that, the poem was very nice. I like how you repeat half of every previous line and add it to the next. It's very sweet and deep. Your poem, I mean. It expresses the rush and the fear and longing one feels at the beginning of a crush. It's cute ^_^

[Aeternal Oceanfire]

Fantastic and tremendously beautiful! A powerful poem, with a powerful meaning!

[Zoe_N.]

thanks for everyone who appreciated my work...

[Amila Jay]

That over rising feeling when you let your emotions flow! Excellent write:)

[EMMIE]

You are so creative and talented with this piece here! Great work!

[Poe Redd]

Feel like cursing at the greatness of this. O.O Love it.

[Loki Ragna-rock]

outpouring of youthful emotion beautifully expressed