Homo Sapiens (A Lune Haiku)

Homo sapiens.

The wise man.

Is this what we are?

Author's Note

My first attempt at this form.

Reviews

[Lilly Negoi]

excellent point - man doesn't always use his age-gathered wisdom, most often people just give in to their basic instincts...
the form itself doesn't respect the pattern of a lune haiku, as in three words - five words - three words per line, but the message is much too well conveyed in it, so the form might just go to hell from my point of view here :).

[Solitaireman]

Interesting choice of style, Zoe. However, I always thought the haiku format was 5-7-5. Your middle stanza had only three syllables. Still it was a nice first attempt.

[Robert Lindsay]

You're spot on. Homo (Potentially) Sapiens might have been more accurate..

[SkinlessFrank]

This calls into question the meaning of wisdom. Are we too wise for our own good that we have the audacity to use the epithet "sapiens".

[Crow]

Wonderful Haiku, a truthful question to which I am afraid to answer.

Excellent!

[Chris]

I don't see the form...but the thought is very clear...

[ATG]

Pretty good poem. It fits the haiku format well enough and it had a good point. Sometimes humanity can seem idiotic.

[Honey]

this was pretty awesome
youre really able to say the most with the least

[John Jackson (El Juero)]

I like this. Humankind has so very far yet to go...if we don't self destruct first.
Excellent. I'm going to give this form a try.

[ice]

This is a perfect lune haiku..The syllable count is right on..It is restricted in the middle, as it should be and curves in on the ends, like a crescent moon.
The message is easy to understand..and contains a complete thought..giving the reader something to think about.
This is the Robert Kelly form..5/3/5..The Jack Collom form has a count of 3/5/3

Anyway, I enjoyed reading this short poem..

ice

[Priyankaabhilaashi]

Powerful..!!!