Sheesh! I thought I would come here and read a poem in your back pages, leave a nice review, that might cheer you up, and help you a little to get out of your funk..But reading this poem made me a little funky..lol, not really, what is, is, and this poem is, and says the truth, even if that truth is hard to face..you have done the poets job well...and that is to have no mercy on your subject, or reader.
Zoe,
While I was reading your verse, I thought why did she not write it in a formation of a cross? Because it would appear guilt is the proverbial 'cross we all bear'. You kept everything tight. It reads well. What I really love is the force you put behind the words. It literally 'hits you between the eyes'. Thank you for sharing.
Sheesh! I thought I would come here and read a poem in your back pages, leave a nice review, that might cheer you up, and help you a little to get out of your funk..But reading this poem made me a little funky..lol, not really, what is, is, and this poem is, and says the truth, even if that truth is hard to face..you have done the poets job well...and that is to have no mercy on your subject, or reader.
'Tranquillise your soul...' is a great way to start your poem. From that moment on the reader is at your mercy and almost feels a part of your poem. Powerful writing.
nice...even in the years when one finds that it is easier to be without the saturated mess of life blocked within there is but the end of life...better to know thy true self than to die filled with guilt...
When the mind is quiet/ you will know your guilt/ and thus know yourself/ but not before....although the whole writing was an amazing piece of work this last stanza and line is pure genius....
Peace
Robin
Do all people ever actually feel guilt or is it just a fear of dying? Some people seem to be able to do anything good or bad without second thought, no remorse no wishes to do it over again. Your poem is an exploration of one man who finally begins to think about his past actions but it is too late for him to gain forgiveness in life. Nice write.
I come from Fife, in Scotland, and I now live in Los Angeles and run a business in the music industry. I've been writing poetry for about as long as I could write! I had a poetry collection published .. more..