Shadows of you

Small song, felt like writing it.

Song name:Drawing demons
Writer:Zoami

Taking up my pencil,
Putting the tip to the paper,
The shadows jumping to to my heartbeat,
The picture coming together in my mind,

Your words like lines,
Bringing everything together,
The shadows controling my every move,
Like torture the piercing pain of love,

The way the pencil moves,
Like your body covered in my shadows,

Author's Note

my first lyrics :P

Reviews

[Mr Whiskers]

The way the pencil moves,//Like your body covered in my shadows

It's definitely something striking--I wonder at the melody that one would attach to it.

[N/A]

I like these alot,and the comparison between the movement of the pencil and shadows,to me, was particularly striking. Good lyrics!

[Kara]

Nicely done. It flows well, and has a good taste for slight imagery. You did a good job, for your first lyrics.

[Elissa; the genuine art..]

I like this.
It has a nice edge to it.
This is really good for your first lyrics.
Keep it up!
-Elissa :)

[AbsentElements]

They may be your first but they are good. It flows really well. I have tried writing lyrics and I only got a few lines. You definetly did a great job on this one